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Elliot Ratched (Order of Adunih NPC)

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Name: Elliot Ratched
Created by: Balthazar Black
Race: Human
Birthday/Age: 94 Ashan 666
Title: Gold Cloak in the Order of Adunih
Skills: Psychology (85/100), Caregiving (80/100), Socialization (60/100), Medicine (30/100), Discipline (30/100), Research (20/100)
Details: A calm, sage-like individual who can not easily be provoked into anger, Elliot Ratched has been a member of the Order of Adunih for as long as he can remember. He joined the Order in his youth and spent a few arcs studying physical health before shifting his focus to mental health issues and psychology. Elliot finds difficult subjects fascinating and enjoys the challenge presented by them because they allow him to further his own studies on the interworking of the human mind. In Ashan of arc 721, Elliot was assigned to evaluate the mental health of Flame Trooper Balthazar Black and to come up with a therapy program to help treat him- an assignment that will prove more difficult for him than any before. Elliot lives in Almund with a small family he does not often talk about. He is a simple healer, looking to make his way in the world and help as many people as he can along the way.

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Defiance: Skin always glows faintly and he is warm to the touch. His is also the center of a field of static electricity so people get shocked touching him on occasion.
Rupturing: Orange etheric cracks spider-web up his arms to his elbows. His eyes and the glowing cracks going down his cheeks glow dark blue.
Transmutation: He has a series of emerald, glowing cracks on his right pectoral.
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Bellinos: His fingernails are always black. The color fades into his fingers.
Celarion: A dim glowing ring surrounds his left forearm.
Palenon: A silver lightning shaped mark about the size of a hand stretching up towards his torso.

Scars

  • Oops, Oops, Ouch: Balthazar Black has twenty scars across his back from a lashing as well as scars on his hands and arms from jagged rocks on Faldrass. There are two scars on the sides of his abdomen from being stabbed and a slash across his back which blends in with the whip scars.
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Re: Elliot Ratched (Order of Adunih NPC)

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I like the NPC - but two issues for me.

1. We don't need the detail about Balth in there, since it's a city NPC - and actually, someone who works as a therapist is likely to have seen / worked with people who are much more difficult to deal with that Balth. That lot can all come out.

2. I'm thinking that they'd send someone with an Immortal mark - I'm thinking that actually, since Balth lied by omission and misrepresented events in the trial - that would be someone with Gwelliph and Sevrath. That will need to be put in as being restricted use needing mod approval to use - so he would then become a "Mod Input" NPC with clear guidelines that mark abilities can not be used unless a mod's ok'd it and never for personal gain etc.

What do you think?

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Re: Elliot Ratched (Order of Adunih NPC)

Alrighty chopped out the Balth line and replaced it with a line about him earning the marks through his work for the Order. I figured he’d be able to do the job without the marks so I don’t see harm adding them.

Here is the updated version (I didn’t change the image cause... well... it was harder than I thought to find one with mark ish looking stuff on them)
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Name: Elliot Ratched
Created by: Balthazar Black
Race: Human
Birthday/Age: 94 Ashan 666
Title: Gold Cloak in the Order of Adunih
Skills: Psychology (85/100)
Caregiving (80/100)
Persuasion (60/100)
Medicine (30/100)
Discipline (30/100)
Research (20/100)
Gwelliph (Favored?)
Sevrath (Favored?)
Details: A calm, sage-like individual who can not easily be provoked into anger, Elliot Ratched has been a member of the Order of Adunih for as long as he can remember. He joined the Order in his youth and spent a few arcs studying physical health before shifting his focus to mental health issues and psychology. His work earned him the attention of the Immortal Twins and Moseke and their marks. Elliot finds difficult subjects fascinating and enjoys the challenge presented by them because they allow him to further his own studies on the interworking of the human mind. Elliot lives in Almund with a small family he does not often talk about. He is a simple healer, looking to make his way in the world and help as many people as he can along the way.
Notes: This NPC has the Gwelliph and Sevrath mark, making them a “mod input NPC.”

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Visible Mutations/ Marks

Mutations
Defiance: Skin always glows faintly and he is warm to the touch. His is also the center of a field of static electricity so people get shocked touching him on occasion.
Rupturing: Orange etheric cracks spider-web up his arms to his elbows. His eyes and the glowing cracks going down his cheeks glow dark blue.
Transmutation: He has a series of emerald, glowing cracks on his right pectoral.
Marks
Bellinos: His fingernails are always black. The color fades into his fingers.
Celarion: A dim glowing ring surrounds his left forearm.
Palenon: A silver lightning shaped mark about the size of a hand stretching up towards his torso.

Scars

  • Oops, Oops, Ouch: Balthazar Black has twenty scars across his back from a lashing as well as scars on his hands and arms from jagged rocks on Faldrass. There are two scars on the sides of his abdomen from being stabbed and a slash across his back which blends in with the whip scars.
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Re: Elliot Ratched (Order of Adunih NPC)

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