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Etzos, ‘The City of Stones’ is a fortress against the encroachment of Immortal domination of Idalos. Founded on the backs of mortals driven to seek their own destiny independent of the Immortals, the city has carved itself out of the very rock of the land. Scourged by terrible wars of extermination, they've begun to grow again, and with an eye toward expansion, optimism is on the rise.

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"We can't get out! WE CAN'T FUCKING GET OUT! HOW THE F-"

Silvester knew talking the boy down wasn't an option. The panic in his eyes had gone beyond anything mere language could assuage. As the flames had grew larger, the smoke denser, the roaring crackle of burning wood louder, it had become an animal thing. Nothing that could be calmed, only directed or-

SHUUK

The old professor lunged forwards and buried his dagger in the boy's chest in the same movement. Practically nose to nose, he watched the shock override the terror... and then be replaced by a new kind of fear. One of sickening realization. An understanding of what was yawning beneath him, inexorable and unstoppable, come to call him to account for a life ill-led. Redson gasped out something that wasn't Common; it was the blood in his throat, Silvester assumed. He yanked the dagger from the kid and let him fall.

The rest of them, huddled and crouching in the burning house, stopped shouting. Now they coughed and prayed and whispered and, most importantly, looked to him.

"We're getting out of here," Silvester said, putting on his best Upset Educator voice, perfected years before. "Just not down here."

"Wh-Where, then?!" Tomlin coughed up a lung before continuing. "The tr-trapdoor's chained shut! I could hear them, behind the wood. There must be a dozen of them-"

"Same wiv' the doors," Haev growled, holding himself together in a way only the truly unimaginative could manage. "Chained from the outside. An' now-"

There was another crashing, shattering, whooshing explosion. Smashing glass and igniting fluid birthing roaring, ravenous flame into the air. Light flared in the other room, where the corpse of Nellie was burning down to black bones. That was the fourth, if Silvester was counting correcting. One for each side of the watermill. Whoever was out there, he'd calmly tossed one fire bottle at each window, on each side. Like a man making sure a cigar tip was lit evenly, ensuring nothing would be spared.

"Get upstairs!" Silvester growled suddenly, not wasting anymore time on idle pondering. "We'll get out through the windows! Go, move, c'mon!"

They skittered away, the half-dozen thugs and turncoats he had left. Nellie and Hadden and... fuck, he couldn't remember the last one's name, they were all dead already. Immolated by the waves of flame that had crashed through the slits in the wooden boards, before washing over everything inside the ground floor like scorching water. He could smell the faint whiff of lye in the smoke. So not just lamp oil, but something extra, something designed to send poison belching forth into the air.

If he can't burn us, he poison us. Clever bastard.

"Haev?! Get that girl outta there!"

"Boss, we ain't got time-"

"Do as I fucking tell you, boy!"

The Voice. It always worked. Even with men in their thirties like Haev. Authority, sheer and loud and recognized, had the big man kicking open the door to Betty's room and heaving her off the bed and over his shoulder without another word. The other were huddled in his study, flames already starting to lick through the floor from below. Smoke poured through the gaps, the door, gathered and crawled across the ceiling like a living, hungry thing. The crackling was so loud now everyone had to shout over it. The floors were starting to burn beneath them. The air itself was charged, scorching, drawing fits of coughing with every breath.

"Wada we do?!" Tomlin screeched, throwing his arms out as he stood before the window. "We're up too high! We can't-"

"Shut up, boy."

Silvester lunged forwards again, only this time led with a boot. He planted his foot against the boy chest with a grunt and sent him careening backwards-

-crashing through the glass, knocking most of it out as he burst into the cold night air. The blast of it was like a god's favor to all those inside, the promise of deliverance to come if they just started moving. Silvester was surging forward before the screaming Tomlin had even landed on the frozen ground below. Reaching out and down and heaving himself out into the night. He gauged the distance... said a quick prayer to any sucker who'd listen... and then dropped.

The landing was rough, but he survived. A moment later, Haev crashed down next to him, Betty still over his shoulder. Like a boulder falling from the sky, his huge frame seemed to absorb the impact far better than the older man. Silvester silently demanded his hand and the big man hauled him upright-

-just as the office floor gave way under the rest of the survivors. There was a hideous, tortured, grinding sound from inside the watermill, now burning everywhere he looked. The foursome of soot-covered escapees staggered or crawled away as the building seemed to sag inwards on itself. The top floor collapsed into the bottom, the roof caved in above it, and the agonized screaming of the rest of The Rues was drowned out a moment later... mostly.

There was one man left. Made a boy in his final moments. Begging and screaming and pleading for help that could not come.

Silvester glowered into the wreckage of his home. All gone, destroyed and made a tomb instead for those stupid kids... speaking of which, didn't have leave a couple of them on guard-

"Y... You!"

He turned and found Death standing before the group. Lit by the tower of flames that used to be a construct of stone and brick and wood and thatch. Tomlin had managed to get to his feet. One arm hung slack, probably broken from the fall. But he had rage enough to numb the pain, and a hatchet in his hand to work it upon the flesh of the man who'd burned his friends alive. He charged towards the little man in rags with a bellow, bringing the ax down hard enough to split him down to the torso-

-only for the man to sidestep, hatchet flying past him, Tomlin staggering, off-balance, over-reaching-

Foolish.

Silvester knew what would happen next. But he still winced. It was the sound, not so much the sight. The bearded beggar wordlessly thrust at Tomlin's tottering form. Every inch the opposite of the boy. Calm, unemotional, composed and, most of all, knowing the business of murder far better. The gladius in his hand shot out like it was part of his arm. The tip punched through the side of the boy's neck and kept going until the tip of it erupted out the other end. Then he yanked it out again, with a twist, ripping the hole all the wider, before the unbalanced boy's forward momentum had even ceased.

Tomlin's last word was not a cry of defiance. It wasn't a cry at all. It was a gurgling, burbling, drowning thing, made through a neck that no longer housed working parts. It was a burst pipe, spewing blood from both sides, and when he crashed down to the ground a moment later, he didn't rise again. Even above the flames, gorging themselves on his history, Silvester cough hear his last, wheezing breaths bleed out into the dirt.

The little man flicked his gladius to one side, knocking most of the blood off... and then pointed it at the man, the muscle, and the girl.

"Haev?" Silvester said calmly. "Give me the girl. Handle this."

"Wiv' fuckin' pleasure, boss..."
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He'd taken his time. He'd learned long ago that it wasn't so much how much of it you had, but what you needed to do with it. Once you'd worked that out, then you could start to worry... or not. He'd spent most of the morning observing the watermill. Noting the boarded up windows on the ground floor, the brass-and-iron reinforced doors. The sentries outside and the movement within. Clearly a place expecting to be invaded, like a castle with the garrison on high alarm. So Kasoria had watched and scowled and plotted... and finally, he'd smiled.

He was glad he'd read those books on the military history of Etzos and beyond. They weren't just good reading, they were educational. Instructive. So many examples of brave and glorious battles from history, skirmishes and campaigns... and sieges. There was one he remembered well, because it spoke to him, for want of a better word. The sheer ruthlessness of it, the brutal pragmatism that could at once be horrifying and yet admirable.

Xandu Keep. 521. High walls, thick gates, veteran garrison... and everything beyond the stone was thatch and wood. In the middle of the Hot Cycle.

The besiegers had catapults and ballistae; Kasoria would have to make do with fire bottles.

He'd made the savage little beauties that afternoon. Lamp oil with a heft spoonful of lye powder dumped in the green glass bottles. A rag stuffed down the neck of each one, then tied around tight with rope, so even on their side the liquid wouldn't spill out. Which would be essential, considering he'd seen what happened when you tipped one of these fuckers back too far, while lit, and the oil came out.

He winced at the memory. Little Willy. Fucking Fates, but he thought he'd never get that smell out of his nose.

Insurance fraud. That's how he'd come to know them. Way back when, before Vorund and Martyn and Jessye, but after the Blackguard. He was just another sellsword, only one with more training than most. Willy and him, they were tapped by a merchant in deep debt to help him claim some money. It was basically his money, was how he reasoned it. Wasn't like he was using the warehouses anymore, and since he couldn't sell the buildings but he was still paying for their safety, well...

Kasoria had nodded along. More interested in their handler Bereek showing them how to make the fire bottles. Kasoria had watched his mottled, burn-marked hands with care. Justifications and spotty reasoning for being a bastard no longer interested him; but technical knowledge like this? You couldn't put a price on that. They'd done the job and Willy ended up with most of his skin attached afterwards. Got a little extra, for his troubles.

Ten arcs later and he was making his own. Mayhap Bereek would have approved.

After the sentries had been silenced, he'd gone to work. Wrapped the chains around the doors, and the bottom of the trapdoor. Locked them tight and tested them as best he could without making too much noise. He needn't have worried; the amount of noise the kids on the ground floor were making, he could have been hammering on the wood with both hands and not been heard. Once the chains were in place, he'd gone back to the burlap bag he'd gently placed on the ground... and took out his tinder.

He heard a commotion from above as he lit the first one. A frantic shape in an upstairs window. Silvester, maybe? It didn't matter. It changed nothing. He lit the rag, made sure it wasn't dangling over his fingers as he pulled back his arm. Not too far that the bottle would tip and the oil would spill. Then he gauged the distance... rolled his shoulder... and flung it-

FWWWOOOSHHH

His face was a demon's grin, red and orange and shadows deep and destroyed in the glare. The bottle exploded against the boarded window. Fire spread across it like oil on water, pouring through cracks and holes, spewing onto the ground beyond, onto flesh and hair and clothes. Kasoria kept walking, lighting the next one, and hurling it-

-the same awful, wonderful noise. Like the gasp of an angry god. Another patch of burning flame, eating through the fortified window. Again and again, until the bag was empty and... yes... he could hear them pounding on the locked doors. The chains clanged and groaned and clanked, but they didn't budge. Not even when the harder, heavier, slower pounding of a much larger figure trying to batter the door down. Now their defenses were turned on them; their strong walls made for a tomb, not a citadel.

Just like Xandu Keep.

They started to scream. Kasoria's face was stony as he listened. He would stay there until the house was a ruin, burned down until he could find that trapdoor in the cellar floor. Then he'd go through the wreckage and find Silvester and take his head for Bangun Vorund. They kept screaming. A chorus of pain and terror. Kasoria had his gladius to hand, this time. Open air, larger weapon, and one far more familiar. He didn't swing it idly, but his fingers rippled across the grip as he loosened and tensed his hold. He would wait, and he would watch. He wouldn't trust to fire what he needed to see with his own eyes, and guarantee with his own steel.

Then the upstairs window exploded, and a man came flying out.

"... huh."

It paid never to underestimate desperation. Even with the world around them burning and their friends melting before them, they still wanted to live. They'd leap from windows to survive. Then Kasoria looked up and past the groaning figure on the ground, and saw he'd been more... persuaded, than choosing to jump. A stocky, balding man lowered himself out of the window next. One that seemed like two men melded together followed, a waif of a girl over his shoulder. Fates, he was so big he didn't so much fall as he stepped the ten feet or so from window sill to ground.

CRASH

They were the only ones. The inside of the watermill seemed to suck in before Kasoria's eyes. The inside collapsed and warped and was suddenly all wreckage and flame in the space of a moment. Then he stepped forwards, into the much larger circle of light... and the boy on the floor saw him.

"Y... You!"

Kasoria cocked his head to one side as the boy got to his feet. After a fashion. He was cut and bruised and covered in soot and probably had more smoke in his lungs than air. But with every wheezing breath, he got a little taller. He was still impossibly holding a fucking weapon, too. Probably stuffed down his belt before he'd fallen. He rose up, taller than Kasoria by some margin (but wasn't that always the way?). Rage burned in his eyes; far hotter than the flames behind him.

He charged. He was angry. He was screaming. He wanted his revenge.

None of these things meant he knew what he was doing, or whom he was up against.

Two moves. One, to be technical, since his actual sword only struck the once. A step to the left, favoring his unmarred leg as much as he could. His arm was tight to his side, elbow at his ribs. It exploded up and out, gladius skewering the boy through the neck. Then he yanked it back just as quickly. The boy never even stopped his charge. The scream devolved into a drowned gurgle. Kasoria didn't watch him fall. He could hear him die well enough. Then he turned back to the others, gave his bloody blade a quick clean... and announced his intent.

Silvester spoke. He knew that's who it was, now. The man giving orders, clearly the man he was here for. At his command, the hulk dropped the girl and Silvester picked her back up. Dragged her to her feet and watched with a wry smile. Obviously thinking he knew how this would unfold. Haev was a mountain, a titan, a giant among men. He pulled the club from his belt, head almost as large as Kasoria's own, and gave him a grin any bear would have envied.

"Shoulda' fucked off, wee man," Haev said as he approached. "Cuz now? Yer fuckin' dead-"

He was quicker than he looked. In the same breath as the last word, the club swung for Kasoria's skull. The little man stepped back sharply, and the club sailed past him. But Haev was already advancing, backhanding towards him, forcing him to-

-duck down to one knee, weapon going over his head again, and Haev retaliated-

-kicking out at the crouching man, lashing out with a tree trunk leg for his face-

Kasoria's left arm snapped out, a quick and precise punch. Haev could have laughed, had he not been busy (he didn't like thinking in more than one direction at once). What did the dwarf think he was going to accomplish? Punching him in the fucking leg. Honestly, it was-

CRACK

Silvester's jaw dropped as Haev went staggering back. He'd heard that thick, meaty sound from where he stood, twenty feet away. Like an ax burying into a tree. Haev roared like a stuck bear as he went down to one knee, barely keeping his club up in a shaky defense. Fuck... his fucking leg, he... he couldn't use it! He looked up and expected to see some magic, some monster, but instead-

Kasoria waved at him mirthlessly, and let him see the brass knuckles around his left hand.

"B-Bastard!"

He was angry, but not quite stupid. Well, he was, but not in this particular area. He came at Kasoria as best he could, with his shin broken under him, trying to support his massive bulk. It was wobbly and shoddy, but when he was that big, it hardly mattered. He thrust out at Kasoria with the end of the club, trying to break the little cunt's breastbone with the metal-wrapped head. But Kasoria danced back yet again, gladius coming down sharply to knock the club head away, left arm snapping out again as he lunged back towards him-

CRACK

Silvester felt an eel of worry crawl into his guts. That was most definitely a cracked skull. But Haev was as inhumanly tough as he looked. He lurched and shook his shattered head and kept on. A roar that seemed to buffet the air around Kasoria split the sky and he heaved the club up and down-

-same as Tomlin had tried, and again Kasoria sidestepped-

"Ha!"

Only that was what Haev was expecting. The swing stopped halfway to the ground and he went for a backhand instead. Masses of muscle thick as sides of beef bunched and heaved across his torso. He twisted and swung with his eyes leaking blood and his leg slowly breaking under him. Swung to smash Kasoria's ribs from the side and-

-instead-

Fates. How fucking dumb do you think I am, boy?

Kasoria wasn't one to make it easy on his enemies. Repeating the same evasion, exactly as before, mere bits after the first time? He was impressed Haev had seen his opening, and then equally appalled he'd thought him so predictable. Instead of his gladius, Kasoria retaliated with his first. He grunted as he twisted hard, pelvis cracking under his skin as he spun around-

-left arm flying out-

-brass knuckles hammering into Haev's arm at the middle of his forearm. Thick bones cracked under the impact. The club went down. As Haev screamed, Kasoria's gladius came up, whirling in his hand. Spinning around his palm, going from the traditional saber grip to a reverse, held like a dagger high above Haev-

-just as the raging, crippled monster lunged for him one last time, reaching out-

SHUNK

The gladius came straight down, behind Haev's head. Its triangular head punched through the bull-like neck. For the briefest of moments, Kasoria felt real resistance to the killing blow. As if mere bone and muscle would stop steel. Then it gave way. Vertebrae were crunched and broken. Muscle was hewn. The gladius sliced and stabbed through his neck. His lunging body meant the gladius stabbed into him at an angle, vanishing into his broad torso. He crashed down onto his front, limbs twitching. Kasoria knew what that meant. The brain's grip on the body was broken; it could rant and rave all it wanted, but everything outside the skull was now beyond it.

Haev was trying to say something. Kasoria ignored him. He simply gripped the gladius two-handed, braced himself... and heaved-

Silvester muttered something profane as he saw this little bastard withdraw his blade, every inch of it from tip to guard soaked in blood. Then he straightened himself as Haev twitched in the dirt. Haev. Tomlin. All of them. Burned or butchered. All he had left of The Rues was this stupid girl in front of him, and as Kasoria turned back to the last bit of business-

"Stay back, damn you!"

The Raggedy Man saw advantage in the usurper's eyes. As if he was playing a trump card Kasoria had never seen coming. He'd hauled the girl upright, using her as a shield in front of himself. One arm was around his middle, holding her steady. The one held a dagger to her throat, shining like a silver smile around her pale throat. Silvester's face was smirking at him over her shoulder, voice calm, in control.

"This girl? She's Finn's little friend. Sure that bastard told you all about this place, hmm? Oh, I bet. Told you about her, too. I'm betting, he only helped you, if you promised to spare her. Well..." The dagger drew blood. Just a little. Just enough. Betty whimpered like a frightened lamb. "You're going to step aside, and let me go. Or you're going to break that promise."

Kasoria didn't speak. He stepped closer. Yard after yard, foot after foot. With every one, Silvester's control seemed to shake loose a little more. He was within reach when the man finally growled and shook his hostage like a doll. The dagger was dripping now. The blade was marred, silver turned to rust.

"Stay back, damn you! I'm not fucking joking!"

The little man cocked his head to one side. He blinked a few times. Still as stone, quiet as the cold. Silvester thought he was mulling it over. He would have been wrong. He knew what he had to do, in the time provided. Now it was just a matter of doing it. He took eight trills to ready himself. Then he spoke. But not to Silvester.

"This won't kill you," he said. Then, as Silvester's mouth opened, he moved.

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Skill Points: +10 (cannot be used for magic)
Magic XP: None.

Renown: +10 (for arson, setting fire to a mill and gang hideout)

Injuries/Overstepping: None
Wealth Points: None.
Loot: None.

Skill Knowledge:
  • Acrobatics: Keeping Your Weight Off Wounded Limbs
  • Blades (Gladius): Switching Grips Quickly, Mid-Combat
  • Medicine: A Broken Spine Kills the Mind's Control Over the Body
  • Poisons: Lye Fumes
  • Throwing (Fire Bottle): Mixture of Lamp Oil and Lye, Ignited by a Lit Rag
  • Throwing (Fire Bottle): Needs to be Thrown CAREFULLY
Non-Skill Knowledge:
  • Etzos Underworld: Thriving Market in Insurance Fraud
  • NPC Bereek: Older Sellsword from Back In The Day, Specialized in Arson
Notes: n/a.

Ah, one of my favorite Two Steps from Hell tracks.

The scenes set Silvester in a role as the proper villain, the set-up having been in the first post of the last thread, the rise of his villainy in the first post of this one with the killing of panicked Redson and... well, we'll get to the last when we're there. This is impressive considering how Kasoria is basically slaughtering the gang wholesale.

Whether one could call Kasoria an antihero, I'm not sure if that's even accurate. It smacks of a grimdark dynamic where the only good few are the ones who die because of their goodness and the roles of heroes and villains are antiquated things.

For this one, I enjoyed that it kept to just Silvester and Kasoria's frame of mind (other than the slight head-hop to Haev during the fight), rather than hopping around between more NPCs, because it gave it more of a forward momentum pacing.

Like in an arena battle royale where one has multiple enemies, but as opponents fall, eventually you're left with those last few and then the final two in which the pressure escalates due to the reduced number. The last two in a royale are often the "strongest" (and/or cleverest) as well, so there's always that added bonus of tension.

Kasoria's IC use of research from books he'd read was a great bonus to him as a character. In the midst of everything, that, and the snippet of a memory, provided a window of context to why he'd chosen the tactics he had. Plus the reminder that one of Kasoria's biggest strengths is his ability to patiently act with precise premeditation.

This particular thread had a lot of one-liners breaking up the paragraphs. In this instance, it created a bit of a jilted, stuttered rhythm. I personally might've preferred more of a flowing rhythm to it, with even paragraphs...

...or a pattern of:
Longest, long, short, one-liner, short, long, longest...
instead of the:
Long, short, one-liner, Long,
if that makes sense. I also understand why the extreme contrast might've been employed for the scene though.

And of course the ending was a perfect full circle for this thread specifically, in that it started with Silvester being an asshole and ended with Silvester being an asshole. It sets up the inevitable that a reader is just waiting for Kasoria to finally take him out and wondering how it'll be accomplished.

Excellent job, enjoy your rewards!

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