Hunted in the Market (Graded)

Etzos, ‘The City of Stones’ is a fortress against the encroachment of Immortal domination of Idalos. Founded on the backs of mortals driven to seek their own destiny independent of the Immortals, the city has carved itself out of the very rock of the land. Scourged by terrible wars of extermination, they've begun to grow again, and with an eye toward expansion, optimism is on the rise.

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Hunted in the Market (Graded)

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The smell of the sewage of Etzos was always a surprise, no matter how much time he spent in his old home territory of the city’s most poor districts. It always brought on a distinct sense of nostalgia, the good old days when he fought for food and safety rather than... to further whatever dark, lonesome path he was on. As the stink of poverty washed over him and Neronin breathed deeply. Things had changed over the past few seasons, but the city stayed as always. Or perhaps it was that the chaotic nature of the city’s change was the root of that nostalgia? Neronin shrugged himself deeper into his robe. He had no business being nostalgic anyway, the sadness for the past implied a regret in one’s growth, one’s change. Neronin was on the cusp of greatness and he had always known his goal was to escape the shit-smelling streets of Etzos, and the rest of the world.

The mage glanced behind, down the darkening alley through which his sodden boots had trudged. The chance of discovery was a danger he now wore every time he ventured forth into civilization. Even moreso because of recent events. For seasons now Neronin had been feeling closer and closer to the shifting spark in him and the dark expanse of magic he had so diligently surrounded himself with than the society in which he claimed to operate. That shift had brought dangers. Gavrel, his old master had come to kill him, with Neronin barely escaping that conflict. He had dodged Etzori patrols and mage hunters more and more in the past few seasons, not that many of them were a match for him now. It was damn inconvenient though. The city watch could discover his oddity simply by getting a prolonged close look at him. Damn inconvenient.

Neronin tucked into the side door to the dilapidated old house he was squatting in on the very edge of Etzos. The first room was thick with dust drifting gently through the light from cracks in the boards that made up its sunward wall. As Neronin entered, his dark robes sent the dust swirling in half hidden spirals. Neronin shr`unk down into the shadows, his breath coming short and quick. He listened with all his might to the outside world.

The Etzori mage shifted his hands and felt his newest spark rise within him. The strong radiating energy felt distinctly different than the rest of his arcane sparks. It was stable and uniform in its sensation where the rupturing spark was wild and pulsating. It was also light and warm where the necromancy spark was dark and vast and cold. He was glad to have it here back in the thick of things where he may need to hide. As of now he barely knew how to do anything with it, save suppress his own power. That was enough to hide from the Etzori who may be searching for a necromancer of significant power.

Neronin wrapped the ether around himself as he cast the Mute. He could feel the arcane shield suppressing the residual presence of his other sparks. Neronin almost winced as he felt the smaller rupturing spark recoil deeper within and the massively present necromancy spark shift and tremble under the spell. It was difficult to keep the Mute spell up over his massively more dominant necromancy magic, but he gritted through it. Neronin had noticed for the first time how large and solidly tethered to his soul that dark spark was when he introduced Abrogation into himself. The necromancy spark was strong and did not enjoy the presence of a second magic to contend with, he knew. It almost had an identity within him now.

Shadows darkened the thin slivers of light as a pair of someones passed the house he was hiding in. Neronin listened as they stopped and conversed in harsh tones.
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“Well, did you sense him or not?”

“I did Javar, but no more. He seems to have disappeared.” Hissed the harsher of the two voices.

“Disappeared?! How could he just disappear.”

“I don’t know!” There was a thud against the other side of the wall and dust fell in liberal amounts from the ceiling. Neronin did not breath for concentrating on his ether casting. “But if you shove me like that again I’ll skin you alive! Let’s go, he probably slunk off into the underground to scavenge corpses.”

Neronin held his breath as the shadows drifted off until he was sure they would not hear his hesitant gasps. He sat there panting for a long time after. That had been the closest they had come to catching him. Etzos has indeed become quite a dangerous place for him. Even walking down his home streets lead to a near capture. It had been harder than he cared to admit, fleeing without the considerable protection and support of Mongrel. Neronin did not want to go back to him until he was sure all his trackers were dead, lest he lead them to their sanctuary.

Neronin now had a strung out and tired frumpiness to his gaunt, already deathly features. He was much leaner now. It went past the point of being malnourished into the realm of dark magic. He could see the bones of his fingers. It came from living off of stolen food when you no longer feel the urge to eat and spending long days running across the countryside or the cityscape. He was a rangy animal slinking back and forth between his holes.

Neronin pushed himself up with a low groan and set off towards the thin spiral stair. He creaked up the stairs and carefully slumped past the tiny open window. Neronin slumped over to the small table in the corner, carefully avoiding the window. He dropped the sack of bread ends on the table where they spilled out over the battered old journal that lay there. It had been Gavrel’s before he liberated it from the old farmhouse so many seasons ago.

He bent and pulled his boots off to let his feet air out and slumped into the chair. Picking up an end of bread and chewing it slowly he felt the hardened food soften in his mouth. When it was malleable enough he bit a piece off. Brushing the rest of the bread aside he returned to his work.

Gavrel’s notes on the lich was guarded by a final code. He could see that plainly from the odd phrasing of the journal. It was common, but it was gibberish. Neronin knew the man had coded most of the important parts of his journals since before he had apprenticed himself to the man, but he could not decipher this one.

Neronin chewed the bread and frowned down at the words. Gavrel had always been a real son of a bitch when it came to his trust issues. Neronin had been with him for years and he couldn’t understand the damn codes. It didn’t stop him from trying to decipher it for another few breaks before he finally pushed the damn journal away. Neronin walked to the window and ground his teeth angrily. He could feel last breadth of his journey ending. He had reached the final door and yet he could not open it.

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Pale eyes stared out at the bustling city of Etzos as Neronin pondered his task. It did not help that right now, somewhere out there, someone was hunting him. Neronin sat back down and began to call upon his spark again. The radiating heat erupted once again and he was able to bring on the ether wrap that suppressed his other sparks more easily than before. He could only manage it smoothly when he was alone and didn’t need it. It had been the same with necromancy back in the infancy of his apprenticeship to Gavrel. Now here, master of necromancy he found his experience most akin to those old days of frustration when he could barely manifest a Sap.

The pale mage smirks and sent a torrent of the dark ether spiraling through the room. It was as easy as breathing now. He would get there with his newest magic. He heard a shout in the street and took a step back from the window.

The master necromancer sighed and snatched up another end of bread from the table. He laid back on the ground and rekindled the Abrogation spark. The radiating source of energy was almost familiar enough that he did not flinch, but it was far from the deeply natural necrotic one. Neronin carefully expelled and worked the only other spell he knew, barrier. After a few long moments the barrier had been created through carefully tasked ether. Neronin grinned to himself and chucked the bread gently into the air. But as the cold bit of crust fell back down it bypassed the barrier without even slowing and smacked him in the face. The ‘barrier’ seemed to shatter into nothing and Neronin squinted tight against the crumbs now threatening his vision. He cursed and spun over to brush them onto the floor.


Neronin gave it up as a bad job. He would have to return to the task of applying himself to mastering this third form of magic.
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Name: Neronin

Knowledge:

Abrogation: Spark is distinctly different from others
Abrogation: Mute
Abrogation: Muting is hard to maintain
Abrogation: More dominant sparks require more effort to mute
Abrogation: Mute allows for arcane stealth
Intelligence: Eavesdropping Basics

Loot: N/A
Injuries: Mishapen Shields (Minor) from light overstepping. Excessive effort in muting has warped his abrogation magics for maybe a couple trials after the fact.
Renown: N/A
Magic XP: Yes Abrogation level-up

Points: 10
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Ahh, another fine connoisseur of descriptive metaphor. I enjoyed your writing style greatly, it flowed well and was easy to read. Really gets me in the mood for some Etzos storytelling.

I enjoyed the desperation of Neronin in this story, it was refreshing seeing such a powerful character hiding his power in this way, and into the bargain being forced to not use it. Out of his element, so to speak, yet in a familiar place.

If you feel I've missed anything or if you have questions about your review, please don't hesitate to send me a quick PM. Thanks!

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