• Mature • Mundane to Monstrous (Graded)

Etzos, ‘The City of Stones’ is a fortress against the encroachment of Immortal domination of Idalos. Founded on the backs of mortals driven to seek their own destiny independent of the Immortals, the city has carved itself out of the very rock of the land. Scourged by terrible wars of extermination, they've begun to grow again, and with an eye toward expansion, optimism is on the rise.

Moderator: Basilisk Snek

User avatar
Kasoria
Peer Reviewer
Peer Reviewer
Posts: 2093
Joined: Sun Apr 24, 2016 3:34 am
Race: Human
Renown: 1330
Character Sheet
Character Wiki
Plot Notes
Templates
Wealth Tier: Tier 5

Featured

Contribution

Milestones

RP Medals

Miscellaneous

Events

Mundane to Monstrous (Graded)

27th Trial, Cylus, 710a
Commercial Circle
Noon




His parents must have really hated him, to have named him "Mortimer" in a city like Etzos. A city where the Immortals weren't just shunned and dismissed, but outright hated and despised. Generation teaching generation to revile them not as gods or shards of the divine, but monsters, freaks, malice and greed made into unholy flesh and stalking the world, with but one goal.

To enslave man, and plunge all Idalos into darkness. And what did they call them, specifically because it sounds so disrespectful?

Morty. Thanks, Mum. Thanks, Dad. You pair of cunts.

"Hmm? Oh, sorry, sir..."

He covered his bitterness well, though. Someone one learned after forty years of the same insults, the same jeers, the same smirks plastered over the same faces. He'd grown thick skin and a quick mind, because he was always, in some way, under attack. Morty - never Mortimer, not even from his children - had found great focus in such constant, negligible abuse. It drove him to put himself above the multitudes of the Outer Perimeter, to get away into the ring fenced in by vast walls. As if there, in the Comm'See, he would find some kind of peace among the richer folks.

"Have a good one, Morty!"

"Um... yes, thank you."

Such was the plan, anyway. Unfortunately, his plans seemed to work just fine, apart from when they came to escaping his name. He'd even used his wife's family's name over the door of his shop, but still, Mortimer was followed by "Mortimer". He sighed and rubbed down his counter, sniffing at the selection he had flanking the space where he packaged orders and took payment. Still good, by the smell of it.

Brie and cheddar. Always pungent, you have to be careful. Can't hide the mold too well...

Another customer arrived, heralded by the ting-ting! of the bell above the door, and Morty greeted him with politeness, if not cheer. The man nodded halfheartedly in his direction and perused the shelves. Picked up some items here and there. Corn. Oats. Potatoes. A few cuts of beef. Bread. Until he was in front of the counter and looking down at slabs of orange and white and yellow. He pointed with a hand that was well-manicured, and callused from wrist to finger pads.

Hmm. Odd duck.

"Half a pound a' that."

"Right away."

Morty knew his business well, and didn't need to weigh cheese... but still did, of course. Full transparency, in front of the customer. He handled the cheese cutter with grace, never needing two cuts, wire slicing through the block of curdled, flavored milk with ease. But when he turned back around with a smile, hoping to find his customer doing the same-

The man was staring at the cutter. In a way that made Morty's smile freeze and then begin to die.

He'd seen lizards before. The kind that lived under the ground, in the endless miles of tunnels under the city. He'd seen the spiders, too. Big bastards, bigger than your hand, that skittered in terror away from you yet still haunted your dreams... and both reptile and insect had the same eyes. He remembered those eyes. Black and fathomless but not dull. Not stupid. There was an intelligence in them, alive and sharp as a razor. Not blinking, not distracted, just plotting in that simple, undeniable way a predator did.

Morty looked at the little man now, and saw that same expression settled over his face like a funeral shroud. He blinked, just once, slow and unhurried like a cat... and when his lids rose again, they hadn't shifted even a little.

"Um... sir?"

"What is that?"

"Um, it's your cheese, sir-"

"No." That finger stabbed out again, pointing to the cutter. "That. What is it?"

"It's a cheese cutter, sir." Morty blinked and a bemused smiled broke the ice that seemed to have frozen his face. "You... You've never seen one before?"

"No. How much for it?"

"I... You want to buy it?"

"Yes. Throw it in with everything else." When Morty didn't answer right away, the man plowed on. Determined look seeping into his shuttered expression. "You have another? A replacement?"

"Well, yes, but-"

"Good. How much?"

"I..." Morty's hesitation, his confusion, the fear that he couldn't quite nail down but could not deny, none of this got in the way of a singular fact: despite everything, he was an Etzori. That meant he knew when to snap up a bargain, and turn any discomfort into profit. Because so often, that was there the deal could be made. "Two gold nels."

The man blinked slowly, and nodded. A bit later, his purchases were bagged up, along with the wiped-down cheese cutter... and Morty grinned at the two gold eyes glinting in a handful of copper and silver coins. He looked up to give his great and profuse thanks, but the man was already out the door.

"Odd duck," he murmured, then shrugged and tipped the sale into his counter. "But who'm I to argue?"
Image
word count: 867
Common Speech | Thoughts | Ith'ession Speech | Speech of Others
User avatar
Kasoria
Peer Reviewer
Peer Reviewer
Posts: 2093
Joined: Sun Apr 24, 2016 3:34 am
Race: Human
Renown: 1330
Character Sheet
Character Wiki
Plot Notes
Templates
Wealth Tier: Tier 5

Featured

Contribution

Milestones

RP Medals

Miscellaneous

Events

Re: Mundane to Monstrous

He was a man who believed in the Law. Not just the fact of it, made real from parchment and proclamation by the Black Guard and the courts and the judges and all the other agents of enforcement, but in the good it did. He believed that the Law was for the protection of all, and those who broke it were defilers of the first order. They embraced a chaos where civilization could not endure, and Etzos was a place of civilization.

Kasoria almost pitied him. Probably because he saw too much of himself in his delusion.

You're half-right, he thought when he first saw Quentus Froth in his tavern, laughing with regulars, pulling pints, breaking up a fight or two. You just forgot that there's more than one law. And you always need to be careful where you're standing when you pick one over the other.

Unfortunately for the barkeep, where he was standing was in the Outer Perimeter. The South Side, to be precise. And his idea of being an upstanding citizen and valuer of the law, had been to identify an agent of Bangun Vorund to the Black Guard. The agent had stayed silent, had remained loyal, because he knew the Law, too. He understood what breaking it would cost him, or his wife, or his parents.

Quentus did not understand. Kasoria had been sent to give the last education of his life.

"A'right, people, charge yer pints one more time then get gone!" The stout man shouted over the din of the bar, ringing the bell above it so hard and loud that a few drunks almost threw up just from the sound alone. "Last shout!"

There were jeers, shouts, laughter, pleas for a commuting of the sentence, and he laughed them all away. But the quiet little man by the fire didn't laugh. He just finished his ale and left a couple of coppers for the girl who'd been serving him. There was a rush to the bar, a crush of thirty bodies determined to have one more quencher before facing the endless but almost breaking darkness of Cylus, and yet he moved against the flow.

That girl frowned minutely when she came over one more time, and found him gone. Just an empty mug and couple of coins.

Like you'd put over a corpse's eyes.

The little man knew that the streets wouldn't need anything so mystical or theatrical to know the truth of the matter. A man informs on someone known to be in tight with Vorund, and less than a season later, he's dead. Not slipping on bath water dead, not gone from the pox dead, fucking murdered dead. That would send a message, and Kasoria sometimes wondered if Vorund didn't welcome outrages like this.

How often are they really just opportunities? Chances for him to remind all those who might be forgetting? This is the South Side. Not the Comm'See, not the Citadel. He's the Law down here, not the Blackjack.

He was behind the tavern when the door opened and Quentus heaved out an empty barrel of ale. A wagon was at the end of the yard, half-loaded with similar, bereft containers. Come the return of the suns, he'd take the lot back to his supplier and wouldn't have to pay extra for new barrels. He was thrifty like that, and Kasoria appreciated a man so determined to save coin. He watched those ruddy features puff and sweat and drip the stuff down his face. So much scraping and straining that Kasoria decided to be a little more... direct.

Using the sound to mask his approach. Like a jackal stalking a bull, sidling up behind him so when the big man finally got the barrel up and turned around-

"Suh? Spah sum coin, suh?"

"Fucking shit!"

The barkeep nearly shit a brick when he found a ragged, hairy, hooded creature with an outstretched hand standing there. Barely up to his chin yet quiet as a mouse, apparently. He reared back instinctively, knowing enough of beggars to know disease and infection followed them like plague. Poor bastards, they were, but he was surprised and annoyed and hang on, he was in the fucking yard!

"Fuck're you doing back here, old man?!"

"Sorry, sorry suh, jus-jus lookin fuh sum char'ee, y'know? Jus a copper, mebbe silva, cmon-"

"Look," a big meaty finger speared Kasoria in the chest and his other hand, the one hidden at his side, gripped those wooden handles a little tighter. "I'll not call the Blackjack because youse look in a bad way, but you leave here now. I'll not give you coin when you're trespassing. Now not another word, just fuck off!"

The derelict bobbed and nodded and his whole body seemed invested in the gesture, like he was genuflecting away from a high lord in some feudal land. As he began to depart, Quentus rolled his eyes and turned away. He had to secure the wagon flap, of course. Fates, the fucking nerve of some people. If he'd gone round the front, he wouldn't have cared. Would have left him alone all night. But instead he-

Three things happened at once, and in the space of the same trill.

First of all, Quentus realized the beggar wasn't leaving.

Second of all, something whizzed in front of his eyes and flapped against his chest for a split-trill.

Thirdly, it stopped flapping, and instead yanked back hard-

-and Kasoria put his new garrote to work.

Quentus was a big man and the smaller one had to stretch to loop the evilly-thin wire up and over his head. The man's arms were occupied with the wagon flap, so he didn't get his fingers to it before-

-Kasoria braced himself, gripping the handles tight and girding himself for the pain-

-and he pulled back as hard as he could, wire suddenly tight and choking against Quentus' fleshy throat. The man tried to cry out but no sound came, no hope of any, either. He pawed at his throat and couldn't find the wire, couldn't free himself! Animal panic overrode any outrage or anger. Every trill, every gasp that did not come, he knew the wire was deeper in his flesh, killing him faster and faster-

Here it comes.

Strength that only the mad or dying possessed. Quentus started to swing and buck wildly, trying to throw off the wielder, if he couldn't the weapon. Kasoria ground his teeth and hung on, hands and fingers burning as he kept his grip on the handles. Like a terrier would a rat, Quentus hurled him around, until finally he legs started to give out. One of them, anyway. He went down and Kasoria seized the moment, giving him just enough room at the man's back to-

-slam his knee into the base of his spine, sending a fresh paroxysm of pain shooting through the man's body. Killing any will or feeling below his kidneys, dropping him flat to his knees, facing the back door of his tavern-

-and let out a bestial growl as he pulled harder, harder, imagining the moment to come-

He felt it, and he heard it, even if he could not see it. The wire finally having its fill of flesh and needing a more succulent treat. The garrote bit through Quentus' throat and into the arteries on either side of his throat. Into his jugular in the middle, nestling next to the voice box. Kasoria felt a certain, indefinable give in his grip. That last quarter of an inch, that made all the difference. Before it, the wire was choking, and painful, and lethal. But after it, everything became-

Wet.

He didn't know what the pressure in those crimson tubes was, but he knew what a mess it made. Blood exploded out of Quentus' neck like someone had shoved a cannon into his chest cavity. Even his killer, standing behind him, felt the misty spray in the air, as the wire began to not just strangle him, but decapitate him as well. He was gasping blood now. Vomiting it. Spewing it from his nose and his eyes and his blue face was a mockery of the living.

Kasoria kept pulling. The job was not done. Not yet.

Not until all strength and life failed the barkeep. Not until he was just holding up dead weight that flopped forward like a sack of flour when he let go and pulled the wire out of his neck. Which was the operative word, actually. He had to remove it from inside the man. That was how useful it was. Kasoria ran a critical eye up the blood-soaked device... then pinched it between two handkerchief-covered fingers... ran them down... and the gleaming silver was there again.

Easy to hide. Silent. Easy to clean. Messy, and sends a message.

He could have kissed it, but never got the chance. Noises from inside the pantry, laughter, chatter, muffled but approaching. The beggar-assassin swept away from the corpse, making sure his face was covered as he did. He was out the yard gate as the door opened, and the woman who appeared may have noticed him go-

But she noticed her husband a moment later. And she screamed. She screamed until she collapsed and she forgot the hooded figure. She screamed until her face went white and her hair would follow in later trials. She screamed so loud Kasoria heard her halfway to his home, and they told him just two things.

The message had been sent, and the weapon proven.

That was all that mattered.
Image
word count: 1640
Common Speech | Thoughts | Ith'ession Speech | Speech of Others
User avatar
Cervantez
Approved Character
Posts: 455
Joined: Tue Jul 03, 2018 8:59 am
Race: Lotharro
Profession: Yari Runner/Mercenary/Assassin
Renown: 195
Character Sheet
Plot Notes
Point Bank Thread
Wealth Tier: Tier 4

Contribution

Milestones

Miscellaneous

Re: Mundane to Monstrous

Image
Mundane to Monstrous

☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠


Points awarded: 10

Knowledge:
Endurance: Hanging On When a Stout Man's Bucking Against Your Grip
Intimidation: Snitches Don't Get Stitches; They Get Fucking Slaughtered
Stealth: Using Noise to Cover an Approach
Strength: Yanking Hard Enough to Pull Wire Through Flesh
Unarmed Combat (Garrote): Get It Around Their Throat QUICK
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq): Knee in the Small of the Back

Non-Skill Knowledge:
Etzos Location: J. Reinhold Grocers, Commercial Circle
NPC Bangun Vorund: Never Tolerates Informers
NPC Mortimer: Runs a Shop in the Commercial Circle

Magic: N/A

Loot: One wooden-handled "cheese cutter"

Fame: +5 "A statement is meant to convey a message to a target audience about a certain or particular issue going on in your world. In this case, however, they'll no doubt be talking about this statement for quite some time I'm sure."

Notes: This was the first Kasoria thread I've read, and I must say it was interesting. A little confusing to understand the flow of the writing style, but I made the needed inferences using context clues to paint the picture of what was happening. I could get behind the "Raggedy Man" as I love the razor focus he has in completing the job no matter what. I was a little skeptical at how quick the wife forgot him as he left, as if questioned by authorities{if any}, she would no doubt recall seeing someone leave the scene of the crime, even if she couldn't make out his face{but that is merely speculation from a criminal justice view}. But all in all it was a good thread, and I'll have to put Kasoria on my list of "must read pcs". Great Job!


☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠ ======== ☠
Your review request is HERE

Please include the following stamp to your review request:
Image

Code: Select all

[center][img]/gallery/image/15325/medium[/img][/center][/center]
word count: 316
Image
Post Reply Request an XP Review Claim Wealth Thread

Return to “Western: Etzos”