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- Language: Atvian
Lorogh
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Lorogh is a fun pc and I enjoy the way you write him very much. There were a few moments in this thread which I particularly enjoyed and that's because of how clearly you paint a visual of him. I loved the image of him standing up from his chair and moving to stand, hands on hip. Like a small and determined super hero, I think.
The conversation on synesthesia was really well written and Lorogh's fascination shone through. Of course, my most favourite moment was one word. Gadzooks, indeed.
This was a well written story with a lovely collaborative flow. The two of you write together very well and you play off each other beautifully, reflecting and enhancing the other's writing. This leads to a beautifully written, well constructed story. I enjoyed it, very much. Enjoy your rewards!
The conversation on synesthesia was really well written and Lorogh's fascination shone through. Of course, my most favourite moment was one word. Gadzooks, indeed.
This was a well written story with a lovely collaborative flow. The two of you write together very well and you play off each other beautifully, reflecting and enhancing the other's writing. This leads to a beautifully written, well constructed story. I enjoyed it, very much. Enjoy your rewards!
Rewards
- Renown: 5
- XP: 15
Knowledges
- Medicine: Synesthesia is a condition that both mages and ordinary people can develop
- Discipline: Controlling your thoughts, to prevent from daydreaming
- Meditation: Controlling one's breathing to maintain a still mind.
- Meditation: Breathing hard and deeply, in order to ground onself in the feeling of being present and accounted for.
- Transmutation: Enduring the pain of a initiation, and phasing into different forms of matter before returning to original form
- Transmutation: Identify: A technique that reads the qualities of materials, as well as their flaws.
Victor Amielle
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This was a very well crafted thread where the two players worked together really efficiently. I think you played Victor's lack of teaching expertise very well here and also showed him learning by teaching, which was great, and he used his previous experience to help also.
As I said to Lorogh, this thread is a really great example of what a collaboration should look like. You two craft your individual posts but always with the other player as part of it. Very nicely done.
Victor is an interesting pc who has many more layers than might at first appear. You played him as being aware of the dangers of initiation and he really did weigh up the risks, which was nice to see. His enthusiasm for his magic shines through and adds to his personality. He's a very likeable pc and I hope you enjoy your very well earned rewards.
As I said to Lorogh, this thread is a really great example of what a collaboration should look like. You two craft your individual posts but always with the other player as part of it. Very nicely done.
Victor is an interesting pc who has many more layers than might at first appear. You played him as being aware of the dangers of initiation and he really did weigh up the risks, which was nice to see. His enthusiasm for his magic shines through and adds to his personality. He's a very likeable pc and I hope you enjoy your very well earned rewards.
Rewards
- Renown: 5
- XP: 15
Knowledges
- Discipline: Pushing your worries aside
- Medicine: Synesthesia is a condition that both mages and ordinary people can develop
- Teaching: Assessing your student's prior knowledge
- Teaching: Repeating important things is a good idea
- Meditation: Sitting down can help you become calmer
- Meditation: Taking deep and steady breaths in order to become calmer
- Teaching: Explaining why you ask a particular question