Depression and Thievery [memory]

[Hinata]

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[Doran]

Hinata:

Knowledge:
Detection 1
Persuasion 4
Intimidation 1

Loot: -
Lost: -
Wealth: -
Injuries: -
Renown: 5
Magic XP: -
Skill Review: Appropriate to level.
Points: 10

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Comments: I like that Hinata is always busy and wants to have something to do, and I thought the way that she tried to seduce/persuade the knight was amusing. I appreciate that you didn’t have her succeed though, although it seems as if she got a bit of good advice from him regardless.

Participating in an amateur brawl is a good way to learn. Hinata’s fear of being disfigured is understandable though. I wouldn’t want to be disfigured either!

And then her purse got stolen! Poor Hinata! She just wasn’t very lucky that day.

It was nice of the Avriel to tell her that someone stole from her even though he was a bit arrogant.

Avriel don’t have beaks though. I was also confused when you switched between calling the Avriel an “it” and a “he”. Avriel are unwelcome in Rharne by the way, and those who do enter are closely watched by the Lightning Knights.

The mention of “God” was a little out of place in my opinion. God doesn’t exist in Idalos. There are the Immortals instead, among other things. A better way to start the second sentence would have been “The Immortals knew she needed something to do […]”, for example.

I wonder if the person that had Hinata's purse really just found it. Either way, reporting the crime is probably a good idea, and I agree that Hinata didn’t deserve to have so much misfortune. Maybe, the next day will be better though?

I hope so, for Hinata's sake!

Enjoy your rewards!

P.S.: I might have added “Seduction” to the list of skills used as that played a part in the conversation with the knight as well in my opinion. Hinata also ran at one point, so “Running” should have been on the list as well.