Knowledge
- •Luke: His Mother's Eyes
•Luke: A Possible Target
•Knowledge of Self: Dangerous to Have More Children
•Malcolm: A Man Eternal, A Love Eternal?
•Singing: Burhan Song of U'frek
•Negotiation: Using Morals to Convince
Injuries: General lack of strength and energy for eight days.
Fame: +5 For Having a son!
Devotion: N/A
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
Magic: Y / N
Comment: Wow, I really liked how naturally you wrote Elyna's thoughts and worries as a mother and as a noblewoman. You both have a very good collaborative voice when writing together and I felt like I could see the whole family cuddled up on the bed! Very well done!
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Name: Malcolm
Knowledge
- •Father's Pride Twice Over
•Elyna: Dangerous to Have More Children
•Knowledge of Self: Devoted to Elyna's Happiness
•Singing: An Sailing Lullaby
•Elsie: Humming Puts Her to Sleep
•Diplomacy: Letting Unpopular Ideas Go Easy
Injuries: None.
Fame: +5 For Fathering a son!
Devotion: N/A
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
Magic: Y / N
Comment: I really felt like I could visualize Malcolm's mood and movement through the thread from your writing. As I said above, I really enjoyed the collaborative voice you two achieve. I think it lends itself to the intimacy of the family your PCs have. Very well done!