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Vaughn

62nd of Ashan 717

The capital city of the of Rynmere, here is seated the only King in Idalos.
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Elyna
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They were compliments. A well-cared for horse, a happy child. She supposed they might be the nicest things he could thing to say to her, given the current circumstances. The bow surprised her, yet she inclined her head, in lieu of standing in order to curtsey and then sit again. The straw pricked against her back and Vara snuffled the bale, nose to the strands as she explored the new scents. Ember seemed to be asleep, a bag leg lifted and resting on the hoof.
I want for your family to work. Bold words and sincerely meant. The lump in her chest expanded and she remained silent. Wondering if he knew that she would include him in her family. He was Malcolm’s son. No, she would never be a Mother or parental figure to him, but this was not a normal family. His Father was over four hundred arcs old and had all the appearance of a man in his late thirties; he laughed like a little boy at times, and grinned like a youth. He was ancient, but he wasn’t old.
He was polite, and she remained on her seat, watching him. He was shutting her out and still, she couldn’t blame him for that either. Who was she to him? The woman who had ruined his life. Had destroyed his Mother in her dying seasons. A usurper to his Father’s affections. Malcolm would be happier if Vaughn was happy. Theirs was a fragile family, and she wasn’t sure that the delicate balance was a secret to anyone who looked in. They balanced on the edge of a knife. Her and Malcolm, each questioning the other, but both working so hard to seize each trial and make it work. For Elsie’s sake, for their unborn babies sake.
“Vaughn,” she called after him, “if there is anything I can do…” She didn’t know if he heard her.
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Elyna

  • Knowledge:
    • Animal Husbandry: Building Affection With Your Horse
    • Animal Husbandry: Brushing Horses
    • Discipline: Reining In Anxiety
    • Discipline: Not Telling The Whole Truth Out of Kindness
    • Psychology: Jealousy Can Be Deadly
    • Vaughn: Thinks You Don't Trust Him
    • Vaughn: Very Like His Father
    Loot: None.
    Injuries: None.
    Fame: None.
    Devotion: +2 Pier & Pre (Tell the truth even when it gets you in trouble)

    Story: 5/5
    Collaboration: 5/5
    Structure: 5/5


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Vaughn

  • Knowledge:
    • Animal Husbandry: Using A Hoof Pick
    • Discipline: Hiding Your Anger
    • Elsie: Not As Old As He Looks
    • Etiquette: Bowing Even When You Don't Mean It
    • Location: Iron Hand Stables
    • Malcolm: Did Not Actually Leave Your Mother
    • Malcolm: Was Poisoned By Your Mother and Brother
    • Rusalkis: Feeds On Anger
    • Vanessa: Could She Have Murdered Your Father?
    Loot: None.
    Injuries: None.
    Fame: None.

    Story: 5/5
    Collaboration: 5/5
    Structure: 5/5


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Comments: This was a beautiful piece of character exploration between the two of you. Grief lays heavily on both of you, and I think you both did justice to trying to connect but having to hold certain truths back. I look forward to seeing Vaughn speak to his father - that will be explosive!

If you feel I've missed anything or if you have questions about your review, please don't hesitate to send me a quick PM. Thank you!
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