Vaughn
Points!:
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:
Caregiving: Looking after someone in shock
Detection: Spotting signs unconsciously.
Interrogation: Forceful questions in emergencies
Lorena: You think she's going to leave.
Lorena: To be married to Peake Andaris
Lorena: Says that Peake Andaris will abuse her
Psychology: High emotions can lead to rash actions
Psychology: Anger can be easier than vulnerability
Loot:
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Devotion:
Magic:
Lorena
Points!:
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:
Peake Andaris: Your intended
Peake Andaris: A brutish man?
Persuasion: Painting the picture of what will happen
Persuasion: Trying to make your point in a number of ways
Politics: Marriage can lead to political power
Psychology: Emotions can be physically overwhelming.
Velijorn: Wants power more than anything else.
Loot:
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Overview:
Lorena: Please link your prophets' notes in your profile, so they appear beneath your avatar. Thanks
Vaughn: Your part of this review is written, drop me a pm once you're approved, and I'll post it straight away. Thanks!
Story An interesting little story - lots of high drama! I very much enjoyed the way you both got your own perspective in there, yet misunderstood each other so well. Good stuff!
Structure A few mis-spellings, but nothing which detracts from the story. All good!
Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!
