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Aukari Occultists incur scrimmage with Gangui and Nightshade Elm.

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[Farmland Plains]Blood makes the crops grow

Gangui stared at the terrible winged creature with disdain at the fact she didn't understand that she had insulted him by insinuating that mortals and Immortals were peas in a pod. Suspicion and fear filled him. Surely she was not from Eztos? Hadn't the City of Stone that had collectively taken a stand against the Immortals?

Cold, calculating eyes stared at her without reciprocating the anger that she exhibited. He crossed his arms. Gangui would remember her sensitivity, perhaps it was because she was a female. The wild-man would also remember that she preferred words over actions, despite being a swords-woman. Simply tossing the torch on top of the corpses would not succeed in lighting them on fire. She seemed to have no regard for the curse she would leave behind for the farmers to clean. She didn't even think of gathering up the mounts of their fallen enemies; they needed new homes as well. Regardless, he did not blame her for actions, because after all she did save his life. The wild man was taught by his father to always shoulder more than his fair share of the work load, so that is what he would do.

Taking his sword, he shoved it in the ground signifying that he was sticking around, "There is still work to do... don't wait for me," he said to the half-blood Avriel before she took her leave in visible anger.

Not spending another thought on her, he turned back to the pile of corpses and began to work. He would have to attend to the fire for the rest of the day to ensure that the job was properly done. His pride had blocked his common sense though, for the right action would be to go to Eztos and get his wound treated. Instead he tied his leg off and dealt with the pain.
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[Farmland Plains]Blood makes the crops grow

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Name: Gangui

Knowledge:
Nightshade Eld: Is easily offended
Nightshade Eld: Refused to take the heads for the bounties/rewards
Nightshade Eld: Is not like you, she has wings
Nightshade Eld: Has a stronger moral compass than yourself
Nightshade Eld: Does not trust you and finds you irritating
Nightshade Eld: Can fly
Mount: Horse: controlling a horse during a fight is difficult
Mount: Horse: Horses need to be trained for battle
Combat: Blades (Long sword): Fighting on horse back
Combat: Blades (Long sword): Using your foot to help pull a blade out
Combat: Blades (Long sword): How to sever a head
Fighting is harder when outnumbered

Loot: N/A
Injuries: (you used to be an adventurer until you took an arrow to the knee...) 1x arrow wound to the calf (lower leg), 15 trials to be good for hard use, 30 trials until fully healed
Fame: +3 killing Aukari Occultists
Devotion: N/A

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
Magic: N/A

Comment: No issues with story or Collaboration, I noticed a slight spelling mistake here or there but nothing a quick reread before posting couldn't fix. Besides the little spelling mistakes it was a great first thread to grade. Very interesting and you played the fight sequence very well. Just be wary of skill level, you have bastard sword , which is similar to a long sword but generally heavier this would definitely affect your fighting and also mount, you have 0 mount skill, you played this quite well with getting bucked but just be wary that your skill with the fast turning of the horse could be a little advanced for your level. Besides these few details you did a good job and played very well with Night, it was an enjoyable read and you have a very interesting character I look forward to seeing more.

Name: Nightshade Eld

Knowledge:
Gangui: A wild man
Gangui: Despicable, you don't like men like him (pride in killing)
Gangui: Has sudden mood swings
Gangui: Hates to be compared to an immortal
Gangui: Believes you should clean up after a kill
Gangui: Came to Etzos for work
Gangui: Is not a civilized man
Language: Simple Statements can have unintentionally bad meanings (your kind)
Flying: Can be calming for you
Flying: Using flight to evade an attacker
Combat: Blades (Scimitar): attacking while in the air
Combat: Blades (Scimitar): stabbing someone in the eye can, sometimes, be as effective as the neck
You must know the gender of a blade before you name it

Loot: N/A
Injuries: 1x small (none major) slash to the wing, 20 trials until fully healed.
Fame: +3 killing Aukari Occultists
Devotion: +5 killing Aukari (not exactly a scheme of Faldrun in particular so I only gave you 5 not 10), +5 Choose the Right Path over the Easy Path (you helped him when you could have just left him there)

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5
Magic: N/A

Comment: No issues with Story, Collaboration or Structure. Very enjoyable and as a first thread of yours to review I was happy. You played very well with Gangui following each others prompts well and explaining the fight well. I liked your comment about naming the blade too, that made me giggle, hence the funny knowledge. Overall good job I look forward to seeing more! Keep up the good work Night, I have seen you doing a lot recently and I think it is great to see, very good!

If you have any questions or issues or suggestions for this review please do feel free to PM me and I will do my best to work something out with you. Enjoy the rewards!
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