To be free [Faith]

Faith and Ti'niva have an interesting discussion about freedom over a game of chess.

23rd of Zi'da 716

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To be free [Faith]

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His vision was blurred by the tears but he could see what happened, Faith had been trapped in some strange metal holding device. He rubbed his eyes removing the excess water as he looked over at her. She seemed uncomfortable, and he suddenly felt it was all his fault. He felt that he had caused her pain, pain she did not deserve. She had, in a not clear way from his reaction, for all intents and purposes helped him. She had in many ways released him from a cage that he had been keeping himself in. For that he was thankful, and his sanity had returned.

Something strange began to happen, Ti began to feel like he was floating like everything below him had gone. He looked to Faith who spoke of there similarities, both had been slaves her to a master and him to his obsession with freedom. She spoke of lessons learnt and a life he had lived as best he could. He had done all he could and he should not regret his life, he had chances more than many and his freedom was something a slave might kill for. He realised this and he looked to the chained up Faith again the image a sorry sight. He tried to stand struggling with the feeling of weightlessness, his legs sliding and his muscles struggling to respond. He stumbled to his feet moving towards the woman before him.

She was reaching out to him and had requested he undo the strange rings around her wrists and ankles. He wanted to free her as he stepped forward but she seemed to move away. He stepped again yet he got no closer to his target. Again his foot slammed through the nothingness bellow him as he reached out towards her hand. He pushed again, running towards the ever moving target, it was like it was running away from him. Everything around him had began to fade as he kept reaching and running. For a brief moment she stopped and he made ground his hand moving inches before hers. "I am sorry, you have done more than you know, you have freed me!" He said to her with a thankful smile, his whole body trying to reach her, to free her and show her the truth that he did not hate her, he was not angry, he was free.

He felt his finger brush with hers ever so briefly as he fell. Everything gave way beneath him and the world around him fell away into darkness as he flew through nothingness whirling and spiraling through the void until he stopped dead on a forest floor all too familiar and real as he returned to his body and the waking world his mind lingering on the chains he had to remove.
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To be free [Faith]

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Ti'niva


Knowledge:
Faith: A former slave
Faith: Loved by Padraig
Faith: Has never worn white before
Faith: Gave you your first kiss in a dream
Faith: Worships Famula
Faith: Wants to do good
Faith: Your friend
Faith: Thinks you are in a cage of your own making
Faith: Freed you in a dream
Philosophy: Everything comes at a cost
Philosophy: Freedom and slavery are states of mind
Philosophy: Right now is all you have
Rynmere Slave Brands: A sword brand on the cheek means that the slave was freed
Rynmere Slave Brands: The sword brand negates the other brands


Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Fame: N/A
Devotion: N/A

Magic: These points cannot be used for magic.


Faith


Knowledge:
Ti’niva: You kissed him on the cheek in a dream
Ti’niva: Likes to hear what happens in your life
Ti’niva: Thinks you owe him nothing
Ti’niva: Freedom is important to him
Ti’niva: Willing to sacrifice social interaction for his freedom
Ti’niva: Saved from death by Moseke
Ti’niva: Worships Moseke
Ti'niva: You freed him in a dream
Philosophy: Freedom and slavery are states of mind
Philosophy: Right now is all you have

Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/5
Structure: 5/5

Fame: N/A
Devotion: N/A

Magic: These points cannot be used for magic.

Comments: Due to the rules of Emea I could only award you few knowledges.

This is the first dream thread that I’ve reviewed and one of the first dream threads I’ve ever read, and I have to admit, I really enjoyed it. I especially liked the discussion about what freedom and slavery are. It was beautifully written.

Ti’niva, I’ve never read any of your threads before, but that’s going to change now. I find your character very fascinating.

There were a few structural issues, especially in regards to punctuation, in your posts, Ti'niva. I decided not to deduct a point, but please check your posts a little more carefully.

If you feel I've missed anything (or gave you too much!) or if you have questions, please don't hesitate to send me a PM.


Picture: "After the Storm" by maf04, licensed under CC BY-SA 2.0./cropped and resized
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