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Joined: Tue Oct 18, 2016 11:55 pm
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Name:

Freya

Knowledge:

Wendell: Has Had Men
Wendell: Done Drugs
Patrick: Not Made for Whoring
Medicine: Self-Medication for Pain using Drugs
Medicine: Building a Tolerance to Medication
Seduction: Less Boundaries while Intoxicated
Seduction: Biting the Neck to Tease
Seduction: Straddling is Intimate

Loot:

None

Injuries:

Continuing of the shoulder Injury, Infection has set in.

Fame:

-2 For General Bad Deed (Drugs, so many drugs, and Corrupting the Innocent Wendell)

Story:
5/5
Collaboration:
5/5
Structure:
5/5
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Name:

Wendell

Knowledge:

Freya: Does Drugs
Freya: Drug Runner
Rhakros: Method of Disposing of Dead
Rhakros: Experiment on Escaped Slaves
Rharne: Punishment for Drug Dealers is Execution
Rakahi: Slowly introducing Words
Rakahi: Speaking with a Native Speaker
Rakahi: Shaping the Words
Medicine: Panorium Powder
Seafaring: Sails of a Schooner
Seafaring: Crew Numbers for a Schooner
Seafaring: Less Wind near Shore
Seafaring: Hard to Right a Schooner


Loot:

None
Injuries:

Minor withdrawal symptoms once Panorium Powder wears off

Fame:

-1 For General Bad Deed (Don't do Drugs Kids!)

Story:
5/5
Collaboration:
5/5
Structure:
5/5
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Comments:

First thread I've reviewed that's even slightly scandalous... I hope you two feel important.

I enjoyed seeing the back and forth between them, though I had to quickly read a few other threads to understand the context. It was interesting seeing their actions while on the Panorium Powder, and how each of them dealt with it. In particular I enjoyed Freya's occasional hesitation as she realized that it might not be the best idea to spend time with Wendell while high.

There were some spelling errors in both your posts, as well as minor grammatical issues (missed commas, etc). Just keep an eye on that for future threads.

I noticed you asked for Rakahi in the thread, but I only noticed one spot where he used it. If there was more, just send me a PM clarifying and I'll add it to the knowledges.

If you feel I've missed anything or if you have questions about your review, please don't hesitate to send me a quick PM. Thank you!
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