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11 Ymiden Arc 716
There is a serenity in the departure. He told himself this whenever the hush of the raiding party started to bother him; the pointed silences were not what the group was accustomed to. For the last arc or so, these same men and women had raided together, sharing in successes and failures together, eating and sleeping and pissing together. They slept in the same quarters, and they shared the same beds sometimes. There was nothing they didn't do together. Some of them had even died while the others watched on, which only spurred them to further violence. But when it was time to leave, something came over the group. There were no jokes, no laughter. Half the time, it seemed like nobody was even breathing.

Yri learned quite quickly that this period of silence was something sacred to the group. They remained silent until they were out of the compound, out of the city, and hunting for their next quarry. He kept his mouth shut, jaw clenched tight to avoid making any sort of noise. He patted his leather armor, first starting with the chestplate. Its dull brown surface was marred with scratches and dents, but it was in tact and secure. Then his leather greaves, made so that he could move quickly and quietly but could still stop an arrow from going cleanly through his thigh. He chose to keep the helmet tied to his belt, only to don it before they raided a camp. He liked to feel the air on his bald head. He nearly smiled thinking about it.

Then he checked the knives. His krises hung from sheathes, one vertical at his hip and the other horizontal across his lower back. He touched the hilts of both, smiling down at the one he could see as if it were a person. Of everything he'd known in his life, the krises were the only things he knew he could trust. Sure, his fellow slavers had saved him multiple times, but Yri knew that they'd sell him for a handful of corn if it meant that they got more corn, and he'd probably do the same to any of them. Especially the feathered ones...

The Raiders were easily some of the more free in the city, especially for those who weren't Avriel in birth. Humans were tools to the avian overlords, and the Raiders were one of the few places where humans could actually do as they wished. The Avriel knew they were helpful as shock troops, and though it pained him to admit it, Yri knew they had their place in the sky. Sometimes, they provided helpful reconnaissance that he knew they couldn't achieve without the Avriel. Still, he found them abrasive and openly hostile, and found that he would rather let one die than risk his own life to save one.

There is always serenity. Or it's fear, and they're scared shitless. He'd be lying if he said he wasn't scared, but he'd be damned before he admitted it to this group. They could watch each other quiver in fear, and it would be denied the next time they shared a fire. Not that being afraid was wrong, but there was a layer of machismo inherent in doing what they did, especially for those Raiders that were human rather than Avriel. Better to equip yourself with emotional armor as well as physical armor, because those accusing eyes cut deeper than any sword Yri had ever seen.

Finally, the door was opened and bronze sunlight filtered into the small warehouse they kept as their barracks. As if a weight was lifted off their chests collectively, the Raiders gave a WHOOP! and started to rush toward the doors. If the moment before the door had opened had been conservative and restricted, the moment after was the opposite. Unbridled chaos erupted as the Raiders shoved and spit and cursed getting through the door, each trying to be ahead of the other. The game was afoot, and there was no way they'd be left behind while the others got the spoils. They had a running tally, a Slavepool they called it, to see who could capture the most. It was mostly for sport, though sometimes bets were made on it. Yri had participated a few times before, but decided not to cast his name in this time. This time, he wanted to be completely focused.

As he passed by a small human woman with mousy features and crow's eyes, she glanced up at him with a smirk. Her eyes led slowly down his chest and stomach to his groin, where they lingered for a moment. She reached out with a scarred hand and touched just to the left of his manhood, brushing a spot on his leg and causing him pain. He shifted uncomfortably as she grinned, looking back up to his eyes.

"Still hurting, eh? It was just an arrow, little girl." She grinned, but the look he gave her wiped the look right off her face.It was her arrow that had pierced through his leg. Yri grinned slowly, staring her down. She knew that he was messing with her, but it still have her chills to look into his face when he cleared it of an expression. She said he had the blank look of death.

"We can't all shoot our friends." He chuckled. "Or lovers." With that, he left her crouched. He pushed past and checked his blades once more before they set out along the trail. They'd received intel that there was a small camp of humans not far from the city, comprised of strong-looking but young humans. They looked as though they could work mines or quarries, but the Avriel hadn't gotten close enough to see the truth of it. They noticed two were armed, but could not confirm whether more were.

Like they give a damn. He doubted that the Avriel gave them all the information they needed. He knew that they liked to see a show, and they could just wreak havoc from above. Chances are, they were looking for weapons that could take them out of the sky, but not ones that could put Yri and his fellow Raiders in the ground. What were a few lost human Raiders when they nabbed ten or twenty more slaves? Yri spat on the ground and kept walking, following the group's leader, Strenn.

Strenn was a big man, seemingly more so because the leather helmet he wore had a massive plume of horsehair jutting from it. It swayed behind him as he walked, his swagger causing it to move much more than necessary. Strenn had mastered using that hair as a weapon, using it to distract opponents so they didn't see his handaxe coming. It was a brilliant strategy, and one that Yri, who had no hair, admired greatly. Perhaps one day he'd get an ostentatious helmet and lead a group of slavers.

Hah! Wouldn't that be something...?" He grinned as the group finally fell into a normal rhythm, falling in somewhere in the middle of the group. His scabbards swung lightly as they trudged towards the camp, the setting sun directly in their eyes. It was going to be a short trip, he hoped. He would very much like a little vacation, where all he had to worry about was eating, sleeping, and making love. Soon.
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The time passed somewhat uneventfully. Though they were quiet, the Raiders joked and murmured amongst themselves. They had two Avriel in the skies, searching for any forward scouts our sentries that the camp may have posted, but so far, they hadn't returned. Yri didn't have much hope regardless. He thought that the Avriel would run them into the guards unaware so that in the donnybrook that followed, they could slip in behind and nab the women and children without being seen. The warriors in the group were more than capable to subdue a few men, and it would allow the Avriel to collect the women and children without giving them time to run away.

Actually, that's not the worst idea... Yri grimaced to himself. He hated to think like that, because it meant that he empathized with the idea that some of the Raiders, the men and women he called his friends, are expendable. Himself included. And as much as Yri liked the other Raiders, he liked himself that much more. He shook his head and continued on, careful that each step was placed just right. He looked ahead, trying to see if there was anything to see, but he just saw more path. Gritting his teeth, he plodded on, left hand resting on the hilt of his side-sheathed kris. He couldn't wait to draw it, to watch its wavy blade as it sliced through the air like rippling water.

From behind him, Yri felt a presence. He didn't have to turn to know it was the mousy woman, Lirea, from earlier. She wore her customary sarcastic smirk, but he could tell that she was wary of their surrounding. Her eyes kept darting back and forth, settling on Yri's for a second or two before moving on. She had her bow in her hands, rather than slung across her back. Though she didn't have the arrow nocked, he knew that she was deft enough with the bow to nock it and fire before the enemy knew she was moving. Yri studied her as they walked, mirroring her caution.

"You know, I love the raids. They make you feel so..." Her voice trailed off as she peered further up the path, where Strenn was walking. He always took point, and Yri felt that Lirea was probably attracted to the point man, though she often shared beds with many of the other raiders. Never Strenn. Perhaps that's why he's always so fierce in battle... He has no release... Yri could barely keep from grinning.

"Alive?" He offered the word with a hint of amusement, knowing that was the word that she was struggling to reach. She glared at him, catching the mockery, before nodding earnestly. He always seemed to get what she was saying, even when she was barely saying anything at all. That's why she liked Yri's company; he would listen without judgment.

"Yea, alive. How do you always know what to say?" She stared at him as they walked, her feet deftly stepping over root and stone as if she were watching. Yri just grinned, his teeth showing in the waning light of the sun. He looked at her briefly, chuckling at the inquisitive look in her eye.

"I'm just smarter than you." He grinned as she punched him in the ribs, pretending that the blow actually hurt him. She knew it didn't, but he played along, and that made her feel better. They walked almost the rest of the way in silence, each looking their respective way to make sure they weren't ambushed.

After long, Strenn signaled for them to halt, silently motioning for them to assemble in three-person groups. They did this every time they approached potential slaves, splitting into the same groups every time. The first time it was awkward, trying to figure out each other's strengths and weaknesses, but after a few raids, the three people knew what to do. In his case, Yri was to watch for Lirea to give the signal, which came from Strenn himself. Then, he, Lirea and a beefy human named Kalff would advance on the camp, usually from behind. As Strenn and his men attacked the front and sides, Lirea and her two warriors would pin them down from behind, with Yri and Kalff stalking in to methodically subdue the prisoners.

"Strenn signaled that were sixteen of them. That means that if any try to escape, you and Kalff have to keep them in. This is a big one." She grinned and stalked off to get into position. Kalff had a wide smile on his oafish face. He always seemed a little slow to Yri, but his skill with his whip was undeniable. He could grab a runner without even looking. It was pretty impressive. The big man crept off as well, leaving Yri with nothing but his thoughts. He nodded solemnly and undid the clasps holding his krises in. He put one hand behind his back, on the handle, and his left hand grabbed the hilt of his side-sheathed one. He waited patiently for the signal that they were to proceed.

I don't know which ones are armed, or with what... He realized before the signal was given. He couldn't break position, not now. It was too close, and if he was out of his spot, he would leave a gap for the prisoners to escape. But he knew that if he rushed in blindly, his luck would be that he would get impaled on spear or sliced in half by a flamberge before he had a chance to do anything. Hah. Just my luck. If only there was an Immortal I could pray to now... He smirked and just put his head down. If he had to, he'd just kill the assailant. It wasn't great, but it would do in a pinch. The silence was deafening, just like before they left. All he could hear was the somewhat quiet murmurs of the camp.

And then it came. The bird-like whistle that was a signal. Just as he heard it, an arrow flew past his head into the camp. Here it goes. He drew his krises and started to move from the brush.
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The screams hit him before he could breach the edge of the camp. The first, high-pitched and hysterical, was obviously a woman's. A quick search found the source of the scream, arrow planted in her right breast about six inches in. Not a kill shot, but enough to slow her down. Good. One that won't be getting away. It wasn't long, however, before there was a man standing in front of Yri. He had a short sword, poorly made but still effective. Yri stared at him, trying to break his courage.

"Are you sure you want to do that?" He called to the man, who faltered for a second before he moved in. Yri smirked and stepped forward as well, deftly drawing his krises. At seeing both weapons, the man with the short sword stopped completely, fear coating his entire face. By then, however, Yri was focused. He stalked in, swinging each kris independently of each other, swirling them in strange ways to distract the swordsman.

Yri parried a sloppy stab, sliding his kris down the length of the blade, using the wavy nature of the blade to slide the straight short sword up and out. Yri dropped low suddenly, swinging the kris at the man's knees. With an agility that surprised Yri, the swordsman lept over the cut and thrust the sword down, scoring a light gash on Yri's shoulder. The two backed away from each other, each judging the other with more caution.

"Lucky hit. Think you can do it again?" Just as he said it, an arrow flew over his shoulder and hit the swordsman in his left shoulder, the thud resounding in his chest cavity. He kept his feet and stared down at the quivering shaft, mouth contorting into a look of pain and horror. After a moment, though, he grimaced and set his jaw. It was a trait that Yri could admire. Perhaps he could convince Strenn to ask for this one to join them. He might be worth the time to train.

The swordsman suddenly rushed at Yri, wildly swinging the sword. Blow after blow was parried, and the pace of the attacks increased with each blocked slash. The swordsman's frustration began to show, and his pace reached a frenetic crescendo, culminating in two-handed chop. Yri stepped to the side and kicked the man's knee, hard. A loud pop echoed away from them, and the man fell to the ground. Yri kicked his head once, then again, kicking into the man was unconscious. As soon as he fell limp, Yri checked his pulse and then rose and turned.

His timing could not have been better. He watched a shadowed form slip off to the side of the invasion, around Lirea's right and into the trees. With a smirk, he knew the hunt would be on. As he rushed off towards the woodline, he shouted to Lirea.

"Missed one. I'm on it." With that, he disappeared after the shadow. He rushed through the trees, leaping root and fallen trunk alike. He never stopped, barely slowed, all trying to keep up with what seemed like an impossibly fast shadow in the night. As they came to another clearing, the shadow stopped and turned, metallic gleam coming from its hand. Yri stopped just inside the circular area of the clearing.

"Lay down the weapon and I swear, you won't get hurt." He tried to sound reassuring, but his deep voice boomed across the clearing. He didn't even believe himself. But what surprised him most was the voice that returned, high and crystal clear. There was an accent he couldn't place, but he could understand the Common.

"No pain, just servitude. I'd rather die." The girl couldn't be older than fifteen arcs, based on the pitch of her voice. She was breathing heavily, and likely tired from trying to escape. Yri took a few steps forward, and the girl waved the knife menacingly. "Stay back, or I'll have to use this."

Yri laughed. She couldn't be serious. The Raiders had dispatched most of the camp by the time he'd sprinted off, no doubt they were finishing up now. If they decided to come looking for him, the girl would certainly be killed. Not that he cared, but he liked the fight in this one. These humans were starting to impress him more and more.

"Give it up. If you kill me, there are eleven more. Can you evade them all?" He didn't wait for a response. He rushed in, and the girl was quick to dodge. She rolled out of the way, coming up behind Yri. He wasn't prepared for her to react, so she scored a nice slash on his right hip, prompting him to leap away and spin around. There was a smile on his face, but that was all. It was humorless. He spun his daggers menacingly.

"Last chance." She stood her ground, and Yri shook his head. "Stubborn as you are, they'll be hard pressed to find something for you to do." He stalked in again, this time more cautious. He thrust the kris at her, and she danced away. He kept in step with her, offering another stab, this time following with a quick cut. She spun to the left and rolled forward, dodging both attacks. Instead, she caught a leather boot in the mouth, knocking her to the ground. Yri was on her in a minute, and he slammed a rock-hard fist into her temple, knocking her unconscious. Without much effort, he hoisted the small girl to his shoulder. She smelled fresh, like she'd just bathed.

"Stubborn bitch. You should've listened." She didn't hear him, of course, but it made him feel better. He carried her through the trees, and continued even when she started to stir. He could hear the raiders, the hooting and hollering of victory. He emerged from the trees with a grin, the girl over his shoulder crying quietly into his back. She beat on him once or twice, knowing it was futile. He passed by Lirea and grinned, spanking the teenage girl on her ass, much to Lirea's ire. The girl yelped, but only just cried more.

"Strenn. I got the last one." He set the girl down next to the others. Thirteen, including her. He looked at his friends, knowing smile firmly planted on his face. He knew Strenn had killed one. He always did, if he could. Three dead, none of the raiders. Two were wounded, and Lirea was looking dour, but they were all in tact. The cut on his hip was deeper than he'd initially thought, but was not life threatening. The trip had been successful so far.

Strenn tied the girl to the rest of them, which were tied multiple times to a tree. Strenn ordered them to set camp, and they'd leave at dawn. Yri laid down on the ground, covered in a skin. He knew he wouldn't sleep well; he never did on a raid. But at least he could lie there knowing that Lirea was jealous, he had captured the lone runaway, and they were going to get paid.

It had been good Trial.
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The time passed slowly as he lied there. He could hear the barely audible movements of his group as they turned over in their sleep, as they snored, as they moaned with pleasure. The adrenaline flowed after a spurt of combat, and the heightened senses usually meant that two or more of the Raiders would indulge themselves sexually. The moans were muffled by furs or blankets that were laid down, so as to not wake Strenn. The warrior was not quick to forgive waking him after a battle, where he falls into a deep trance-like sleep. If disturbed, the wrath was not something that was easily forgotten.

But what Yri heard the most was the scraping of the rope that tied the prisoners. He knew that it was the girl, scraping the rope against the tree bark, trying to use the rough surface to fray the strands enough to break it. He knew that her wrists were bleeding, he could smell the metallic scent of blood in the air. He didn't move, didn't alert her to his knowledge, just lied there and listened. He knew the frantic pace matched her heart, and he didn't smile at the notion. She was trying to free herself, trying to fight against what she knew was going to be certain tyranny. Again, the raider found himself admiring her courage.

He listened more intently, straining his ears against the ambient noise to listen for her sobs. Try as he might, he couldn't hear them. That startled him the most. She wasn't sobbing. Her breathing was controlled and rhythmic, and each scrape came more and more furiously. She must be nearing the time when the rope would fray enough for her to escape. Yri was curious as to whether she would waste time trying to untie the rest, or if she would sprint off and try to make it herself. Untying them all could cause enough distraction for her to get away, but some, if not all, of them would likely die in the process. Or she could try to slip away unnoticed, and come back for them. She knew she'd never make it, but alive as a slave was better than dead as worm food.

And then he heard her sharp gasp, quiet but triumphant. He still remained motionless, listening for her to stand. She did. A smile branched over his face. He heard some of the others stir, but quiet as a whisper, she was gone. Yri grinned and stood, grabbing his weapons. He sheathed them on and set off after the girl on foot. The rest of the camp barely even stirred, lost in their carnal affairs or dreams.

He didn't run, even though he knew she was. She'd be much easier to find if he remained calm. She would have to tire eventually, and she would be much easier to find if she were resting. He stopped and examined a footprint, obviously that of the barefoot girl. It was deep, as if she stepped more heavily to push herself through the brush. He followed the angle, keeping low to the ground. His kris remained in his left hand, and he tracked her further and further in. After a break or so, he knew where she was going. She had gone to the clearing where they'd met, probably to bed down for the night. She couldn't be so naive as to think that he wouldn't try to look for her there. Perhaps she was setting some sort of trap.

As he drew closer to the clearing, he knew that he was right. She had returned, and her footfalls were lighter now. She was crafty, so he walked the perimeter of the clearing, checking to make sure she hadn't done anything to sabotage his entrance. But when he looked into the clearing, she wasn't there. Unless she were lying in the grass, she had used the clearing as a distraction to put distance between them.

Clever girl. He smiled to himself. The smile faded as soon as he felt the pinching sensation on his right arm. He looked down to see an arrowhead protruding from it, tip covered in crimson. He stared at it, much like the prisoner who Lirea shot the trial before. From the corner of his eye, he saw movement. The girl was running, Lirea's bow in her hand and the quiver strung from her leg. Though his arm was in excruciating pain, he turned and chased after her. He couldn't let her escape, the Avriel overlords would never allow it.

After a few steps, his legs felt numb. It hadn't occurred to him, but Lirea must have coated the arrowheads in a paralytic. He fell to a knee, then flat on his face. The arrowhead protruding from his arm was nearly touching the ground, and there he lied as his quarry got away. The last thing he could think before he succumbed to the pain was Clever, clever girl. The world turned black.
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His head was swimming. He could feel the throbbing pushing against his eyes, but couldn’t remember why. As he slowly opened his eyes, the blinding light shoved daggers into his pupils, causing a groan to escape from his lips. He heard shuffling and then muffled snickers, and everything came rushing back. He reflexively flexed his arm, and he could feel the tight bandage covering the dull ache from where they pulled the arrow out. Slowly, his dry lips parted into an embarrassed smile. He knew those snickers.

”Quiet.” He could barely croak the word out before his head throbbed again. Lirea just snickered again, but when he opened his eyes, he could see the concern on her face. After all, it was her bow and arrow that took Yri down. With a wry smirk, Yri pushed himself into a sitting position. His muscles screamed at him, but he pushed through the pain. He looked into Lirea’s maroon eyes and grinned. Even that hurt.

“And the girl?” He took a deep breath to steady himself as his head swam. Lirea shook her head, but it was Strenn that answered. His deep voice was stern and slightly judgmental.

“Missing. Which she wouldn’t be, if you had been paying attention.” Yri knew he was just blaming someone. Nobody saw the girl escape, and nobody knew that Yri secretly let her so he could hunt her. Oh, he’d probably be sold into slavery himself if they knew. Yri suppressed a grin. How mysterious the world could be.

“I don’t recall you stopping her either, Str—“ Right before he finished, Strenn’s right hand landed hard across his cheek. Yri’s head snapped to the side, and the muscles in his neck were in agony. However, through a bloodied lip, Yri grinned. “Do you feel better now?”

He knew Strenn was just frustrated, and one slap to the face wasn’t going to kill him. The main concern was the girl. Yri tried to stand, but found that his legs were weak. Lirea put his arm around her neck, and Strenn grimaced.

“We lost one. She won’t be the first, nor the last. Can you travel?” Aw, he is asking if I’m okay. The thought made Yri grin. He nodded, and the group started to pack up camp. Lirea supported him for a little bit longer before he tried it on his own again. That paralytic was powerful, and it took a while for the poison to remove itself from his body.

Yri knew that he should feel some semblance of shame for losing the girl. He should feel slighted that he was bested by a young human girl with no resources. But he wasn’t. He was impressed. She’d given him more trouble than any male he’d ever captured, and while she may not have given him a real fight, she challenged him mentally. And won. And something in him enjoyed that. Mostly, the Raiders just kept to themselves. They didn’t challenge him, and even Lirea when they are making love, she was mostly just there. Yes, Yri climaxed and she reacted to the stimulus, but there was nothing there. It was carnal. This human girl, she was a metaphysical. He WOULD capture her. Perhaps not this time. But there would be a time when he would hunt her down, he would find her, and he would enslave her. Or marry her. He couldn’t decide yet.

The grin must have showed on his face, because Lirea shot him an accusatory look. Sometimes, it felt like she could read his mind. He smirked at her and kept limping along, his muscles still stiff. Lirea let him bear his own weight after that, but he didn’t seem to mind. They were trekking back to their barracks, and there, he would have all the time he needed to plot to find this girl again. He wouldn’t be bested for long.
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YRI G'HANNA:
Rewards:

  • Story: +5
  • Collaboration: NA
  • Structure: +5

Knowledges:

  • Basic
    • Advantages of Being a Slaver in Athart
    • Follow Your Pre-Raid Checklist
    • NPC: Slave Girl, The One That Got Away
    • NPC: Kalff, Fellow Slaver
    • NPC: Lirea, Fellow Slaver
    • NPC: Strenn: Slaver Squad Leader
    • Only Acknowledge Fear to Yourself
    • Race: Avriel
    • Respect Slaver Traditions
    • Slavers' Mutual Trust Goes Only So Far
    • The Slavepool Wager
  • Specific
    • Avriel: Leave the Men to the Slavers and Grab the Women and Kids
    • Avriel: Providing the Details on the Targets
    • Avriel: Strategy is Cowardly but Effective
    • Blades: Kris: Wavy Edge A Plus to Parrying
    • Escape Technique: Fraying Rope Against Rough Surface
    • Hunting: Track Patiently, Don't Rush
    • NPC Kalff: Master of the Whip
    • NPC Lirea: Lover and Confidante
    • NPC Strenn: Helmut Plume Distraction Technique
    • NPC Strenn: Unforgiving About Loss of Sleep
    • NPC Slave Girl: Becoming an Obsession
    • NPC Slave Girl: Determined and Resourceful
    • Raid Details: Some Targets Will Submit to Initimidation
    • Raid Details: Rounding Up The Stragglers
    • Raid Details: Slaves That Fight Back Deserve Options
    • Tactics: Come From All Sides
    • Tactics: Each Group Has its Purpose
    • Tactics: Split Into Groups of Three

Loot:

Nothing to speak of


Loss:

Nothing to speak of


Injuries:

Slash on the shoulder, slash on the right hip, arrow in the right arm
All are treated and bandaged, but you will be dizzy for another day and it will be three weeks before the wounds are fully healed


Fame:

As a slaver, you should already be -10, so note that on your profile.
For this thread, I am awarding a further -6 for two victories in single combat.
Now each should be -4, but I'm going with -3 for the lesser feat of it being in a slavers' ambush.
Also one was against a teenage girl.
I am assuming you feel like going for negative fame. If so, you now should be at -16.
If not, you'd still start at -10, but would get +6 back, so you'd only be -4. it's your choice. :D


Comments:

Very enjoyable. Nice that you cover pre-raid atmosphere and your leader's idiosyncrasies. There was a good, but not overdone, amount of focus on attitudes within your crew. I'm also glad that you only had yourself account for 2 captures, and that you took wounds in the process. I hate folks that make themselves out to be impossibly capable. And it's sweet that you let your pride and overconfidence get the best of you. Definitely a 5-worthy effort.
There was very little to comment on as far as structure goes. I noticed that you had the word "intact" in two words ; "in tact". It should be one. Also, there were a couple of technically incorrect contexts of a couple wrds, but I doubt anyone but a grammar Nazi like me would notice. :lol: Definitely a 5-worthy effort.
I will PM you with your wages for Ymiden 716. $$$$$
PM me with any comments or concerns :)
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