Elyna
Points!:
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:
Lavender: The smell is stronger in the night
Malcolm: Has promised to be back
Malcolm: Has promised to write
Malcolm: That was some kiss!
Malcolm: When he begged, it broke your heart
Malcolm: Will dream of you, and think of you whilst he is gone.
Simon for a boy, Elsie for a girl?
Discipline: Listening to your head, rather than your heart.
Animal Husbandry: Using food to comfort animals
Loot:
Fame:
Malcolm
Points!:
Story: 5/5
Collaboration: 5/ 5
Structure: 5/ 5
Knowledge:
Swimming in the cold ocean will leave you with a cold
Elyna: Worried about waking you on the morning you left
Elyna: You need her with you
Elyna: Even when you begged, she said no.
Elyna: Feels she has to stay
Elyna: Wants you to come home safe
Simon for a boy, Elsie for a girl?
Persuasion: Some people are just too tough to crack
Carpentry: Building a chicken coop
Loot:
Fame:
Overview:
General comments. What an emotional thread! As I read a post by Elyna, I was thinking 'don't go! don't go!' and then, I'd read a post by Malcolm and I'd think 'go with him! go with him!' I love these characters and this was a powerfully emotional read. It was raw and honest emotion and I loved it!
Story Well, I had tears in my eyes when he left and didn't look back, so obviously I enjoyed it!
Structure No worries, all good!
Please do PM me if you think I've missed anything or you have any questions!
