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[Rhakros War, Mature] Aftermath (Graded)

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5th of Saun 719


He could feel his luck slipping away. As he moved his hands, hoping to the ancestors that he could make it out of that forsaken pit, every ounce of plague matter and the dead bodies covering his sad carcass fell away before those hands. He'd pay for this salvation in luck. It was his blessing or his curse. He knew not from whence it came but had seen enough to know that it would rob what wealth he had.

His luck and fortune was gone by the time he climbed to the top of the plague pile that had been his comrades and looked around. Flies buzzing as far as he could see, a miasma that blocked his vision from afar. Yet he could smell it on the wind. The smell of inferno. The conflagration of the defenses of Rhakros. So they brought along incinerators? Interesting, would've been nice to know more details from the Braxtons and Marshal, but marks were only there to die. Not ask questions.

Clavam spat on that idea, and the slippery pile that gave way beneath his boot. The fires were to the east, so that meant north, so he'd just take a left and high tail it back to Etzos. The war was going to be won, they had Lisirra's forces on the backfoot. Barring some calamitous failure of judgment by the Marshals and Lady Sintra, the war would go the way of Etzos. But Lisirra was Immortal. Could Immortals truly die, or be beaten? Etzos lore would have it as such.

At any rate, there was one Immortal flanked by thousands of men and ghosts who all desperately wanted another Immortal dead. Clavam put his money that the former knew well enough that it could accomplish its goal, the death of the other.

The war would end, but the struggle for the Etzori way of life would continue. They'd just see if Mortal will was enough to overcome Immortal guile.

Clavam, for his part, dismissed such high minded musings as soon as they occurred. What he wanted now, was to collapse into some cloistered den, into the pillowy bosom of a Outer Perimeter whore.

So he walked away from it all, not deigning to follow after the incinerating force, but doubling back the way they'd come. The corpses and what had been corpses squished beneath his boot. He could almost feel the fortune slipping away with every step he took. No ordinary mortal man had any right to proceed over that plague-ridden field without contracting some form of rotting illness. Yet here Clavam was, walking over it like it was a particularly foul smelling pile of cow shit.

He walked for at least a break, had the ranks truly been this thick? Or was the slime dissolving them, displacing and expanding their mass as they were liquified?

More troubling thoughts, Clavam suppressed them. One foot in front of the other was more thought than he'd rather exercise. So he just kept right on over the plague fields.

As he went along, he stepped on firmer and firmer ground. He was mere ten feet away from stepping on real soil, then he could run for true. Then, with a sudden shock, a hand shot out of the ground and gripped him by the ankle.

"The fuck!?" He kicked at the hand, but it held his ankle fast. He half expected some undead abomination to spring out. Instead, he pulled himself along, trying to make distance, but with every step he pulled the corpse out of the ground. He didn't make it all the way to the soil, before he realized it was no corpse. Well not really. It was Culler Roote, that damned Rhakros traitor.

"Pleeease, Clavam. Take me wid you!"

"Fuck off! And let'go! I'm leavin'."

So saying, he skipped forward and kicked the Rhakros mutt in the shoulder, freeing his ankle as the Sev'ryn's hand relinquished its hold. Then he was off toward the North.


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Clavam didn't appear to have his pick of company, as he trudged through the jungles and wetlands of Rhakros. Culler Roote followed at his heels like a curr that'd been fed one too many sweetmeats and now bonded its mangy hide to the first human it saw. Well, it looked like he was stuck with him, at least until he made it back to Etzori territory. Where the men stationed were far less likely to tolerate a bug-eater from Rhakros.

The deserter tried his best to ignore the Sev'ryn curr as he marched along, off the beaten path. They weren't following any roads, for fear of being fingered as a Rhakros straggler. Most of the Etzori soldiery were going the opposite direction, after all. Who would go toward Etzos when glory awaited in the south?

"Clavam? Where are we going?" Culler mewled as if he wanted to go to Rhakros, where his former friends and kin were currently being barbecued to a crisp.

Clavam readjusted his two iron iklwa on the back of his shield and then shot a sharp glance at the Sev'ryn. "The fuck you think we're going? Back to civilization. They won't know if I deserted. They took us for dead in that plague soup..."

Just a little while longer, and they'd be able to find a clean water source, to wash off the gunk before the benefit of his curse wore off.

They traveled a few breaks farther to the north, getting farther afield from any known paths or foot trails. Clavam had to remove several ticks and other such bothersome arachnids from his clothing at several points. Grunting as one particularly juicy tick was removed from the back of his knee, he placed it on the rock, and smashed it.

"Fuckin... Hey Culler, you think the Leggy Bitch has eyes on the ticks too?" Clavam asked, shooting the question over his shoulder. But nobody answered.

"Culler...?" Clavam let the name hang on the air for a moment, and then ducked swiftly when he heard the sounds of rhythmic footfalls on the fallen leaves and brush.


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The leaf over leather that covered his shield swayed in the motion of ducking beneath the brush. He watched for the movements of soldiers, wondering if they were after deserters like him, wondering if they brought dogs...

"The Tarantula wants him alive, Bess. He's nobody special, barely capable of following orders, so he should be a cinch for the crow to brainwash." The lanky man said. His legs rang with every step of his idalinium ring mail greaves.

Fuckin' shit material. Clavam thought of the ringmail, readying one of his iklwa. He slid it out of the hide sheath where he kept them.

"We'll take him however we can. Just keep moving." Highmark Legs was in charge of this duo patrol of spinners, posing as soldiers. For all the talk of Sintra's reputation for manipulation, Leggers were as subtle as a brick to the balls.

They were getting closer. Clavam readied his short spear, holding it by the very end of it's shaft, and the blade out of sight. He had the beginnings of a plan, hamstring the talker, and then deal with Legs. He furrowed his brow, keeping his eyes down until the critical moment.

The talker crossed behind the tree trunk in front of Clavam, and then he went to work. He swung low with the blade of his iklwa, hacking into the front of the shin. A sharp tugging slash to retreive the spear. Then he thrust forward and upward into the hamstring of his enemy from where Clavam knelt.

The talker went down shouting in pain, but Legs was no slouch. She was on Clavam fast, brandishing a wicked gladius. He stood up to guard himself. It was all he could do before she was on him, flashing iron as the blade of her weapon. The gladius hacked away at the adhered brush and leather covering of his shield. The wicker material underneath the leather gave way at the edges. It wouldn't be long before he lost the benefit of it's defense.

Legs wound her arm back for another swing. Yet he was ready. Clavam pushed forward with his shield. Once her swordarm was pinned out of the way, he jabbed the point of his spear into her thigh. Then it went into her arm, thrusting here and there without much rhyme or reason. She snarled, but didn't go down. She fought like a bitch cornered. She knocked his shield aside, and then thrust the gladius up into his abdomen.

He stood in shock for a moment, dropping his spear. He thought the last thing he'd see before he faded was her mocking smile and red-brown eyes. But then a Rhakros warcry sounded from nearby. Culler leapt on her, flashing his dual scourges. The strips of jagged chains rended through her soft armor, into the flesh underlying. She screamed at the pain, but there was little she could do.

Clavam, meanwhile, slouched on the ground, the gladius still jutting out of his abdomen. It was just one wound... He could handle this, he could...

If he could only ignore the bloody screaming of Legs as she died a horrific death at the hands of the Rhakros Witch Doctor. He took the gladius by the hilt after dropping his spear, and began slowly removing it. He closed his eyes, remembering his luck. But did he have any fortune left to spare?

The blade made a squishing sound as it exited the wound, and blood spattered over the ground. Yet, it wasn't as profuse as he'd expected. Probably missed the major artery. But gut wounds were fatal. He had little hope of surviving this.

But then, something strange began to happen with the skin that had parted beneath the gladius. It began to knit itself shut, into an ugly, winding scar. "Another curse?" He grumbled, his insides burning still. Every move he made hurt, and he wouldn't be able to fight the rest of the way.

Meanwhile, Highmark Legs' screaming had stopped, even though Culler continued to flay at her senseless corpse with his scourges, breathing in blood lust and poisonous intent to dismantle the bitch.

Clavam coughed, spitting out some blood. "Culler... My fucking wound..."

Then he fell on his side, and was senseless a while.



He awoke a few breaks later, his body appeared to be shifting with the rumbling wheels of a cart. He was seated on a stack of hay, with a small wing of soldiers surrounding him, glowering down at his face. A few of them spat to the side. "Traitor. You and that witch doctor.... Is that how you survived the goop?" The air was filled with other such accusations and questions, but Clavam could scarcely make sense of them.

The pain in his belly had died down some, and when he reached a hand to feel the wound he felt no swelling. Someone possibly had been caring for it.

"Fuck you all, it was Legs or me... I wasn't gonna burn." He muttered barely able to make sense of his own words. Yet as they rolled onward, he began to regain more of his faculties. Until he sat before a small, informal tribunal at the gates of Etzos, before being escorted to the dungeons to linger before his ultimate fate.


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Clavam

Clavam Raskalsson
Skill Points: +10 (cannot be used for magic)
Magic XP: None.

Renown: +15 for surviving the slaughter of the west flank of the Northern Host, and deserting only to be caught and publicly condemned.

Injuries/Overstepping: A nasty wound that, while it will heal, will leave him out of commission at least for the rest of Saun 719.
Wealth Points: no (presumably lost what wealth he had as a result of surviving the fall of the western flank.)
Loot: Used scar domain to survive a greivous wound, which will leave a large scar that forms protective tissue around his abdomen. (Scars Mortal Born Domain power)

Skill Knowledge:
[*]Endurance: Scar Domain ability: One wound can be chosen every ten days that will not kill him, and heals over into an ugly scar that forms a protective tissue.
[*]Endurance: Marching back through poisonous goop.
[*]Tactics: Poverty Domain Power: Giving up wealth to ensure survival of a catastrophic event.
[*]Stealth: Hiding in the underbrush.
[*]Combat: Polearms: Stabbing and slashing on the backdraw.
[*]Combat: Polearms: Targetting the hamstring to bring a bastard down.

Non-Skill Knowledge:
  • none requested.
Notes: Nice templates, I like the green!
Skills Used: Novice Polearms (1h); Novice Tactics; Novice Endurance; Novice Stealth; Novice Intimidation; Novice Fieldcraft; Novice Navigation; Novice shield.
Skill Review: Appropriate to level.

This was a great introduction to Clavam. It had nice pacing and offered insight into his personality, where he's coming from (without going so far back), and his relation to the Etzori. Interesting that he thinks his MB abilities to be curses. The fight scene read clean and understandable, but not predictable. Great job on setting the atmosphere and premise-personality for this character! The details added here-and-there, but not burdening the prose, helped with the clarity but also gave flavor to the scenes.

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