Clean and Teach

The surrounding lands of Rharne boast several towns and settlements that lie on the northern shores of the River Zynyx. This includes Mistral Village, Caervalle Town, Zynyx Market and Volta.

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Last edited by Amaterasu on Tue Dec 08, 2020 5:04 pm, edited 3 times in total. word count: 11
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Re: Clean and Teach

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Experience: 10 these points may be used for necromancy xp.

Knowledge:

Necromancy 2
Teaching 1
Endurance 1
Socialization 2

Renown: none

Skill Usage: Appropriate to level.

Loot/Losses: none

Injuries/Conditions: none

Consequences: none

Comments: I checked with the Rharne mods to see if there'd been an earthquake around this date on the calendar. There wasn't. I realize you were probably trying to give your character something to do, but please refrain from conjuring a major geological event in memory unless it exists in the calendar for that memory in that location.

I have to be honest, I found it difficult to follow the text and plot of this solo. Is there a reason that Amaterasu is vomiting so often?

There are sections at the end where you seem to copy-paste an entire paragraph. When removed the text still comes to 1500 roughly.

If you have any concerns about this review, please PM me about them.
word count: 160
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