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Llyr Llywelyn
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Fri Nov 08, 2019 8:31 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: The Fading LIght
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: A lot of references to various political events involving Etzos and such. This is also Doran's dreamwalking initiation.

Requested Rewards:
Doran
Skill Knowledges:
Deception: Wording things carefully so that you don’t give away too much
Discipline: Remaining patient
Discipline: Keeping your calm in the face of extraordinary events
Discipline: Refraining from asking too many questions
Discipline: Not showing how surprised you are
Discipline: Standing still while someone is pacing
Discipline: A neutral tone
Discipline: An expressionless face
Discipline: Refraining from touching something
Intelligence: The current political situation in Etzos
Intelligence: News travel slowly sometimes
Intelligence: Someone’s research can reveal a lot about them
Intelligence: Putting clues together
Intelligence: No answer is an answer as well
Research: Some libraries are better than others

Non-skill Knowledges:
Dreamwalking: Initiation
Dreamwalking: Lucid dreaming
Dreamwalking: Branding
Dreamwalking: The Veil
Dreamwalking: Doors
Dreamwalking: Entering another’s dreamscape
Dreamwalking: Using magic in Emea is dangerous
Dreamwalking: You can change the way you look in Emea
Dreamwalking: You can change your dreamscape

Llyr Llywelyn: Initiated me into Dreamwalking
Llyr Llywelyn: Etherist
Llyr Llywelyn: Mister Magpie
Llyr
Skill Knowledges:
Intelligence – Contact: Doran Thetys, a doctor and professor in the academy at Viden.
Intelligence: Exchange of information based on location and names.
Intimidation: A poised, unexpected arrival.
Negotiation: Initiation into Dreamwalking for Possible Return of Research and Intelligence.
Politics: How to use information to your advantage.
Politics: Can be used in tandem with Intelligence.
Politics: The Big Picture.
Politics: The importance of contacts.
Research: A professor has more access to libraries than a student.
Seduction: Playing coy.
Stealth: Hiding in another’s dream.
Stealth: Appearing out of seemingly nowhere.
Teaching: Discerning between enthusiasm and impatience.
Teaching: Teach the foundation, first.

Non-Skill Knowledges:
Dreamwalking – Brand: Doran Thetys (on lips).
Dreamwalking: You can change the way you look in Emea.

Doran Thetys: A doctor.
Doran Thetys: A professor of alchemy.
Doran Thetys: Hero of Oscillus
Doran Thetys: Sesser (marked by Syroa).
Doran Thetys: Worked with Lord Vuda.
Doran Thetys: Currently resides in Viden.
Doran Thetys: Escorted him to the Veil.
Doran Thetys: My Initiate.

NPC - Lord Vuda: Likely isn’t dead unless a body is found.
NPC - Lord Vuda: Aware of everything that happens in Etzos.

Woe: A Webspinner.
Woe: Lethodra (marked by Sintra).
Loot: n/a
Injuries/Overstepping: n/a
Renown: n/a
Wealth Points: n/a

Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sat Nov 09, 2019 12:13 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: It Can't Be
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: Violence and language, per usual for both.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Kasoria:
Detection: Recognizing a Place from The Past
Detection: Noticing the Flaw in Another's Recollections
Discipline: Turn and Face The Past
Endurance: Shaking Off a Punch to the Face
Endurance: Tightening Your Muscles to Absorb a Blow
Negotiation: Calling a Truce
Negotiation: Showing Faith By Returning a Weapon
Rhetoric: Answering Accusations
Rhetoric: Matching Vitriol
Rhetoric: Letting Rage Fuel Your Tongue
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq): Swiftly Shifting Your Guard to Block Multiple Incoming Punches
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq - Combo): Double Kick, Disarm and Counter
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq): Holding On to an Enemy to Keep Them Close enough for Additional Blows

PC Maxine: Alive After All These Arcs
PC Maxine: Believed Kasoria Betrayed Her Back in Etzos
PC Maxine: Marked by the Immortals
PC Maxine: Far Deadlier Than the Girl Kasoria Remembers
PC Maxine: Marked For Death Should She Ever Return to Etzos
Philosophy: No Compromise With The Hated Immortals
Philosophy: You Do What You Must to Survive (with one exception)

Max:
Blades (Dagger): Plunging Through the Eye
Deception: Using Thrown Muck to Mask Your Attack
Deception: Using Unarmed Attacks to Hide Your Reach for a Blade
Endurance: Fighting Through a Strike to Your Face
Intimidation: Implying You're More of a Challenge Now
Intimidation: Invading Personal Space
Intimidation: Threatening to Attack with Divine Abilities
Intimidation: Threatening to Drown Someone
Intimidation: Threatening to Remove a Mage's Spark
Unarmed Combat: Push-Kick
Unarmed Combat: Keeping Your Pattern Unpredictable
Unarmed Combat: Mixing Feigns into Attack Patterns
Unarmed Combat: Changing "Levels" of Your Strikes


Loot: N/A
Injuries/Overstepping: Nah
Renown: Nope
Wealth Points: No
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No
 ! Message from: Pig Boy
Claimed 11/08
word count: 298
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Emelia Enners
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sat Nov 09, 2019 2:54 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Fire in Your Heart
City/Area: Almund
Notes/Warnings: Enjoying fires?
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Cosmetology: Using ashes for eye shadow
Socialization: Using manners when addressing your elders
Rhetoric: Gossiping
Persuasion: Pleading with your parents
Endurance: Withstanding heat from a fire
Endurance: Running all the way home

Loot: NA
Injuries/Overstepping: NA
Renown: +5 for "helping" with fire relief?
Wealth Points: NA
Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: Also no
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sat Nov 09, 2019 3:48 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: The Lute, Part 2
City/Area: Andaris
Notes/Warnings: -
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Strength: Carrying a box full of kitchenware
Strength: Pulling something out from under a trash heap
Endurance: Carrying a heavy load over a long distance
Endurance: Being forced to stay in your room
Discipline: Smiling even though you are miserable
Persuasion: Making people pity you might help

Loot: -
Injuries/Overstepping: -
Renown: Reviewer's discretion.
Wealth Points: -
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
 ! Message from: Abra
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word count: 80
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Kasoria
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sat Nov 09, 2019 11:14 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: I. Sandman
City/Area: Commercial Circle, Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Foul Language... less than usual, though

Part One of Three, as Kasoria starts a fresh hunt...

Requested Rewards:

Skill Knowledge:
Detection: Navigating by Touch
Intelligence: Knowing Who has Answers, and Thus Whom to Question
Lock Picking: Keeping the Bolt Tight with the Tension Bar
Lock Picking: Setting Each Lever While Keeping the Bolt Tense
Lock Picking: Touch and Sound is More Valuable than Sight
Persuasion: Appearing Non-Threatening (as much as possible)


Non-Skill Knowledge:
Etzos: Many Buildings Have Entrances to the Underground
Etzos, Vhalar 719: Whole City Celebrating for Trials After the Sacking of Rhakros
NPC Moira Vorund: Widow to Bangun Vorund
NPC Moira Vorund: Tough and Shrewd
NPC Moira Vorund: Knew Her Husband's World
NPC Moira Vorund: Knew Kasoria, and What He Does
 ! Message from: Abra
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word count: 142
"This is the life we choose, the life we lead. And there is only one guarantee: none of us will see Heaven."
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sun Nov 10, 2019 1:17 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: A Series of Emean Excursions III.
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: No
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Acrobatics: Getting the legs out of the way when hurdling
Animal Handling: Soothing an animal spooked by blood.
Running: Running a hurdle race
Running: Take deep breaths while running
Strength: Properly picking up a prone body
Strength: It’s difficult to tuck a body under your arm

 ! Message from: Abra
Claimed
word count: 69
Let's play 'What's Weird About Prae'

Head

  • A fiery rune shines under his right eye
  • A firey glow in the back of his mouth

Arms

  • A ring of blue runes floats over each of Prae's wrists
  • A silver shield marks the back of his right hand

Misc

  • His tail is about eight feet long, usually knotted around his waist
  • His body temperature is uncomfortably high

Surroundings

  • Wind gusts with every step he takes
  • The area around him is slightly more static-y than normal
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Egaro
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sun Nov 10, 2019 3:48 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Distant Horror
City/Area: Rharne, The Stormlands, Shores of Lake Lovalus
Notes/Warnings: Hex ghost skill write-up. Memory of the buggy hollow for the hex is a part of F’hank ‘he wolh spirhts
Requested Rewards:
Skill
Hex: Evocation - Focusing on a memory
Hex: Evocation - Carving a rune as an artistic representation of crafting a memory
Hex: Evocation - A long and draining process
Hex: Evocation - Memories used in the creation of a memory are lost
Hex: Evocation - Evocated memories mimic life, and can be addictive
Materialization: Ingress to the beneath is less taxing than egressing

Loot: Npne
Injuries/Overstepping: None
Renown: None
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: No

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Kasoria
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sun Nov 10, 2019 4:37 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: II. From Below
City/Area: Commercial Circle, Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Violence, Language, the Usual

Part Two of Three, some delightful yet brief violence to spice up the schemin'.

Requested Rewards:

Skill Knowledge:
Abrogation - Shackle (Master): Can Launch Iron-Hard Tentacles across the Air at a Target
Abrogation - Shackle (Master): Can Be Conjured Almost Instantly (depending on distance)
Discipline: Holding Back so You Fight to Disable, Not Kill
Negotiation: Knowing When to Just Shut Up
Stealth: Stop, Look, Listen
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq - Combo): Knee Strike to Get Them Down, Head Slam to Finish Them


Non-Skill Knowledge:
NPC Bangun Vorund: Had a Network of Informants Across the City (geographically and socially)
NPC Moira Vorund: Loved Her Husband, Not Matter What He Was
NPC Moira Vorund: Knows about the Pro-Sintra Forces in Etzos
 ! Message from: Abra
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word count: 140
"This is the life we choose, the life we lead. And there is only one guarantee: none of us will see Heaven."
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Praetorum
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sun Nov 10, 2019 8:38 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Governance
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: Nu
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Detection: Figuring out what feels wrong about a dream
Detection: Checking for ether drain
Investigation: Trying to figure out how far an ability goes
Tactics: Infantry vs Cavalry
Tactics: Hollow Circle formation
Tactics: There’s a time and place for the turtle formation

 ! Message from: Abra
Claimed
word count: 60
Let's play 'What's Weird About Prae'

Head

  • A fiery rune shines under his right eye
  • A firey glow in the back of his mouth

Arms

  • A ring of blue runes floats over each of Prae's wrists
  • A silver shield marks the back of his right hand

Misc

  • His tail is about eight feet long, usually knotted around his waist
  • His body temperature is uncomfortably high

Surroundings

  • Wind gusts with every step he takes
  • The area around him is slightly more static-y than normal
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Sybil Malach
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Re: Review Request 2.2.2

Sun Nov 10, 2019 11:35 pm

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Thread Name: • Mature • Polymathy
City/Area: Viden
Notes/Warnings: Reference of crime, intoxication, paranoid analysis of power dynamics, cuddling, Immortals, blood and teeth, references to possession, references of mental illness.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Doran
Deception: Pretending to be empathetic
Deception: Pretending that you didn't notice something
Deception: Omitting certain details
Detection: Noticing that someone looks tired
Detection: Strangely colored "blood"
Detection: The smell of rum
Detection: Noticing that someone makes strange noises in their sleep
Detection: The sound of fighting
Discipline: Resisting the urge to cough
Discipline: Drinking something you don't like
Endurance: Spending an entire evening drinking
Endurance: Holding someone close the entire night
Endurance: Forcing yourself to stay awake
Medicine: How to treat a nosebleed
Medicine: Withholding information can be dangerous
Medicine: Causes of tooth loss
Medicine: How alcohol affects the body
Psychology: Alcohol can make you act out of character
Psychology: How alcohol affects the mind
Psychology: Nobody is truly objective
Strength: Holding someone in place
Strength: Lifting someone up
Strength: Carrying someone in your arms
Sybil
Discipline: Holding off shock about Doran's confession
Discipline: Hiding cumulative stress
Discipline: Resisting the urge to drink with Doran
Discipline: Alcohol can affect one's convictions
Discipline: Resisting some of Doran's interrogation
Discipline: Resisting the urge to just be out with the truth to Doran
Discipline: Withholding shock from the effects of partial-possession
Negotiation: Compromising with information
Negotiation: Getting Doran to surrender some power in a dynamic
Negotiation: Social placement changes the weight of demands
Negotiation: Negotiations can be smoothed over with good drinks
Psychology: Social power can affect one's perceptions
Psychology: Recovery is a process
Psychology: Some mental scars require time to heal
Psychology: Concept: Heroism
Psychology: Concept: Unreliable Narrators
Sociology: Viden values education (Core)
Sociology: Viden values social connections (Core)
Sociology: Viden values wealth (Core)
Socialization: Acquaintance: Doran
Socialization: Having an odd trait or reputation helps start conversations
Socialization: Everyone wants a friend in some capacity
Socialization: Power dynamics can shift a relationship overall
Loot: N/A
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: Up to Reviewer
Wealth Points: N/A
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Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No
 ! Message from: Abra
Claimed
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"The machinations of apathy benefit only those that have power upon you. Yet, are not all gods and men made equal beneath the weight of steel? What then to the flames that tempered that iron into steel? To make what was impure, pure again, it must be sent through a crucible of flame. Cooked until all that is left is the purity of a blameless soul. Iron that weeps is not steel. Iron that has been tortured, burned, scorched, becomes steel through redemption alone."
-Sybil Malach, justifying the burning of a necromancer.

NPCs: Karlsson, Margaret

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