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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Fri May 17, 2019 1:20 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Puppies, Pegasus, Padraig and Potatoes.
City/Area: Faith Augustin's House, Lake Lovalus, Rharne.
Notes/Warnings: None.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Faith: None.
Nir'wei: None.
Loot: 2x Diri, Cyshe and Shule.
Injuries/Overstepping: None.
Renown: None.
Wealth Points: None.
Collaboration: Yes.
Magic Experience?: No.
word count: 48
Mess with me, I'll fight back. Mess with my pack, and they'll never find your body.
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Mads
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Fri May 17, 2019 3:35 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Wan Fak
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: none
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Mads

dreamwalking-
brand: Zarik Venora

Zarik

Dreamwalking: Other dreamers can visit your dream.
Dreamwalking: Time does not operate the same.
Dreamwalking: Seduction can extend to the surrounding environment.
Seduction: The caress of a stranger.
Seduction: A Caress as a Greeting.
Seduction: A Caress as a Farewell.
Seduction: Frequent dynamic eye contact.
Seduction: The controlled beauty of Emea.

Loot: none requested
Injuries/Overstepping: if applicable
Renown: if applicable
Collaboration: yes
word count: 84
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Sybil Malach
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Fri May 17, 2019 10:33 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: [Out and About Viden] The Slow Season
City/Area: Viden
Notes/Warnings: Violence, alcohol, swearing. Cliffhanger ending due to continuing in another scene.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Sybil Malach
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Jakob Daud
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Loot: N/a
Injuries/Overstepping: Jakob- Getting his lights knocked out
Renown: Public barfight. Up to you.
Wealth Points: N/a
- If you are claiming Wealth Points, please link to your Wealth Thread for this season, as Wealth Points can not be awarded before this is completed:
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: N/a
word count: 342
"The machinations of apathy benefit only those that have power upon you. Yet, are not all gods and men made equal beneath the weight of steel? What then to the flames that tempered that iron into steel? To make what was impure, pure again, it must be sent through a crucible of flame. Cooked until all that is left is the purity of a blameless soul. Iron that weeps is not steel. Iron that has been tortured, burned, scorched, becomes steel through redemption alone."
-Sybil Malach, justifying the burning of a necromancer.

NPCs: Karlsson, Margaret
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Eddrick Brodon
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 12:58 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: An Echo of Meilin
City/Area: The Hotlands
Notes/Warnings: Nahh, just fun
Requested Rewards: 6 - per single page, solo thread
Skill-Based Knowledge:
  • Detection: A Ghost's response may reveal their anchors and obsessions
  • Discipline: Not Letting a ghoulish image scare you
  • Intelligence: Combining Old data with new to realize the whole story
  • Leadership: Kissing through a ghost's image to end a possession
  • Persuasion: How you structure the delivery of information is important
  • Storytelling: Past meeting with elder of the Alakani tribe
NON Skill-Based Knowledge:
  • Convey: Breaking an Item a ghost is passing through hurts them
  • Ghosts: Being touched by copper and related alloys hurts them
  • Ghosts: Not the same as animated dead
  • Ghosts: The ghoulish images they may wear are not real
  • Ghost Skill: Convey
  • Ghost Skill: Possession
  • Hotlands Location: Borruck's Farm
  • PC Race: Ghost
  • Krorros: 'Might of the Conqueror' can make you forget you're injured
  • Krorros: 'Mortal Foe' can show that an enemy does not HAVE to be fought
  • Possession: A physical shock to the host can disrupt a possession
  • Possession: Ectoplasmic damage hurts the host, but does no real injury
  • Possession: Willingly allowing it makes for far better communication
  • The History of the nomadic Alakani tribe
Loot: (If applicable)N/A
Injuries/Overstepping: Took a good beating, but he's also rested
Renown: 5 maybe if the story gets out among other desert folk.
Wealth Points: N/A
Collaboration: Nope, solo
Magic Experience?: Nope
word count: 246
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 4:15 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: No Longer Dreaming
City/Area: Quacia
Notes/Warnings: none
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Zarik-

Dreamwalking: Can be used as a tactic.
Dreamwalking: A Dreamer can follow you into reality?!
Etiquette: Calmly accepting the sudden presence of an uninvited stranger.
Intimidation: Not knowing where someone appeared from.
Intelligence – Contact: Kiwi, a Quacian dreamwalker from Emea.
Negotiation: Open to questions.
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Kiwi: Quacian dreamwalker that I met in Emea.

Mads

discipline-
refraining from making an instinctive comment
choosing to avoid a touchy subject
calmly waiting for a reply

intelligence-
contact: the Quacian dreamer

Loot: none requested
Injuries/Overstepping: if applicable
Renown: if applicable
Collaboration: yes
word count: 105
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Lei'lira
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 2:46 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: First Steps
City/Area: Rharne
Notes/Warnings: This thread might need to be reviewed by a mod due to the reward I am asking for it. Also, breeding horses is talked about (and done) in this thread, but there are no graphic descriptions.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Skill Knowledges

Animal Husbandry; Scalvwing Steed: are bred the same way as horses are
Animal Husbandry; Scalvwing Steed: since they are equines, stallions are interested in a Scalvwing Steed mare when she is in heat just as they are in any other mare that is in heat
Animal Husbandry; Scalvwing Steed: horses and donkeys have similar gestation periods to a Scalvwing Steed mare
Animal Husbandry; Scalvwing Steed: Scalvwing Steed mares will accept other types of equine stallions as acceptable mates
Animal Husbandry; Scalvwing Steed: crossbreeding with horses
Business Management: the importance of keeping detailed records

Loot: Lei'lira is breeding thirty seven mares in all with the aid of Saikuru to ensure that each of the thirty seven mares would conceive on the first breeding attempt, so I am hoping to gain at least thirty seven foals. She is also using two Animal Husbandry capstone abilities, one in the planning stages, and one in the actually breeding of her mares. One of those abilities has a 15%-25% chance that some of those mares will produce twins without harm to them. I will leave it up to the reviewer to decide if any of the mares do have twins, and if so, how many do.

In addition to this, she is using that same capstone ability to aid her in crossbreeding several breeds of horses that have different abilities. The ability greatly enhances her chances of getting the desired traits she wants in the offspring, but again, I will leave it up to the reviewer to decide how successful the attempt is.

Finally, her other capstone ability (described in the second post of the thread with the approval link) will cause the offspring to be born with high levels of intelligence.[/offtopic]


Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: maybe slight (5) since she is discussing her plans with her family, and others might over hear her family talking about it later.
Wealth Points: none
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no

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Last edited by Lei'lira on Sun Jun 02, 2019 2:16 am, edited 1 time in total. word count: 377
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Llyr Llywelyn
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 5:24 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Labyrinth II
City/Area: Emea
Notes/Warnings: Gory dreamscape, physical/mental abuse. unique knowledge request, PM me if you have questions.

Requested Rewards:
Psychology: Using Dreamwalking to process trauma.
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Dreamwalking: Control over your own dreamscape.
Dreamwalking: Can be useful to recover information.
Non-skill Knowledge
Personal: I remember now.
Alistair: Brainwashed me using an artifact ring.
Dominant Ring of Empathy [Pair]: All Non-Skill Knowledges from Contamination no longer overrides any prior knowledges that contradict them.
Recovered Memories
Alistair: Knows.
Broken Compulsions
Alistair: Never Slapped Me.
Alistair: Never Spat on Me.
Alistair: Never roughly gripped my arm.
Alistair: loves me.
Alistair: My First, My One, My Only.
Personal: It is an Honor for others to enjoy my body.
Personal: I will only ever allow Alistair that honor.
Personal: I am Alistair’s love.
Personal: I love Alistair.
Loot: n/a
Injuries/Overstepping: n/a
Renown: n/a
Wealth Points: n/a

Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: n/a
Last edited by Llyr Llywelyn on Sun May 19, 2019 7:11 am, edited 2 times in total. word count: 161

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  • An iridescent halo that hovers over his head.
  • Crystalline legs from his toes to the mid of his thighs (like stockings made of quartz embedded into his skin).
  • An ever-moving inky tattoo, with Rorschach-like designs, on his back.

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Most noticeable is two parallel lines, with an triangular arrow point connecting them, on the center of his forehead.

Totems

When in a totem's body, Llyr's mutations persist but his scars do not.
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Azrael
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 6:00 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: The Last Broken Blade Part 1
City/Area: Yaralon (Emea)
Notes/Warnings: None
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
- Blades (Dagger): Open Palm Stab
- Blades (Shortsword): Parry in a confined space
- Acrobatics: Rolling to your feet
- Acting: Pretending to be injured
- Stealth: A torch as a distraction
- Stealth: Creating shadows to hide in
Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: Arm sliced
Renown: None
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: No
word count: 70

Sesser Mark

  • Transformer's Toolbox [Minor]: Azrael can make superficial changes to his appearance (hair, nails, skin, eye, and voice.)
  • Ever Alluring I: Azrael seems to endure harsh conditions better than others and everyone, despite sexual orientation, is just a bit curious what he would be like in bed.

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Sybil Malach
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sat May 18, 2019 7:42 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Hunting a Hunter.
City/Area: Viden
Notes/Warnings: Psychological recovery, bear corpse, ends on cliffhanger to be continued on another post.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: (A list of knowledge)
Sybil Malach
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Tulias
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Loot: N/a
Injuries/Overstepping: N/a
Renown: N/a
Wealth Points: N/a
- If you are claiming Wealth Points, please link to your Wealth Thread for this season, as Wealth Points can not be awarded before this is completed:
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: N/a
word count: 313
"The machinations of apathy benefit only those that have power upon you. Yet, are not all gods and men made equal beneath the weight of steel? What then to the flames that tempered that iron into steel? To make what was impure, pure again, it must be sent through a crucible of flame. Cooked until all that is left is the purity of a blameless soul. Iron that weeps is not steel. Iron that has been tortured, burned, scorched, becomes steel through redemption alone."
-Sybil Malach, justifying the burning of a necromancer.

NPCs: Karlsson, Margaret
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Azrael
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Re: Review Request 2.2.1

Sun May 19, 2019 5:18 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: The Last Broken Blade Part 2
City/Area: Outside Yaralon
Notes/Warnings: Possible violence warning. I have a guy get hit with arrows... and a guy gets stabbed...
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
- Ranged (Short Bow): Notch on the right side
- Ranged (Short Bow): Full draw for power
- Ranged (Short Bow): Half draw for speed
- Disguise: Helmet means they can't see my face
- Deception: Lure them in
- Stealth: Spring loaded doesn't get noticed, normal dagger does.
Loot: A bow. He'd have abandoned the disguise stuff shortly after but kept the bow.
Injuries/Overstepping: Arm still sliced from last part
Renown: I'm not sure that it is worth any?
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: No
word count: 122

Sesser Mark

  • Transformer's Toolbox [Minor]: Azrael can make superficial changes to his appearance (hair, nails, skin, eye, and voice.)
  • Ever Alluring I: Azrael seems to endure harsh conditions better than others and everyone, despite sexual orientation, is just a bit curious what he would be like in bed.

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