Initiation: Take One

17th of Cylus 719

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17th of Cylus, Arc 719

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Edyn studied his face for some time, then nodded. "Take off your armor." She told him. A gesture at the fire had it roaring up higher, casting more light on their makeshift camp as Praetorum began to strip off his plate armor.

Rolling his previously injured shoulder, he found it satisfactorily healed, with only a slight tightness. It took some bits for him to remove everything, but soon he was kneeling before the fire dressed only in the gambeson and chausses that served as padding for his armor. On her feet, Edyn was maybe a head taller than him, looking down with a serious expression.

"Ready?" Praetorum nodded, and she began. "This is going to feel very strange." She told him, and began to trace her fingers over his forehead. It was a strange sensation; he couldn't see what she was drawing, but he fancied he could feel something tingling there, and he could definitely see sparks and flickers of light above his eyes.

He gasped when she finished, sudden awareness washing through him. As her fingers dropped down to his arm, his hearing and eyesight sharpened, nearly dazzling him. He closed his eyes briefly, trying to orient himself. He was acutely aware that he could hear his own heartbeat in his chest, that Edyn's soft breathing was now audible to him. When he opened his eyes, he found the dark was barely any obstacle to his vision anymore, that he could see as vividly in this trial long twilight as he normally could in the bright Ashan sun


He'd be able to spot a fly at a hundred paces, with this. It'd be invaluable in the heat of battle, especially the increase to his hearing. To be able to rely that, to be able to react to danger without having to turn one's head... Praetorum's mind was swimming with possibilities. 


With every rune Edyn laid upon him, Praetorum could feel his anticipation spike, a confusing mix of fear, excitement, determination and resignation. He had committed to this. He was committing to this. But that didn't mean he wasn't afraid. He could hear his heartrate increase as Edyn laid a sixth rune on his tail, and stepped back. "Normally," she said, kneeling in front on him, "a body can only take six runes at a time. So this is your last chance to back out. We don't have to do this right now if you're uncertain; neither of us are going anywhere. We could leave it for another few trials to give you time to think."



The problem was, Praetorum reflected, that time was exactly what he didn't need. He was already on the edge of his proverbial seat, his entire body strumming like a plucked string. If he stopped now, he didn't know that he'd ever have the courage to go through with this. The path forward was laid out for him now, and he wouldn't back down.

"Do it." He told her, and she nodded.

Praetorum closed his eyes as her fingers traced over his chest. They were past the point of no return; no point regretting his decision now. He tensed as her fingers stilled, then pulled away from him, but nothing happened. 


Opening his eyes again, he looked nervously at her, and found her staring at the rune on his chest, clenching and unclenching her fist. She was steeling herself too, he realized, studying the look on her face. He couldn't have said why, but it was surprisingly comforting not to be the only one here who was afraid. 


With almost agonizing slowness, she reached out again, and pressed her palm to his chest. 


And his entire world erupted into a blaze of light.

Last edited by Praetorum on Thu Feb 28, 2019 2:33 am, edited 2 times in total. word count: 641
Let's play 'What's Weird About Prae'

Head

  • A fiery rune shines under his right eye
  • A firey glow in the back of his mouth

Arms

  • A ring of blue runes floats over each of Prae's wrists
  • A silver shield marks the back of his right hand
  • A ring of light around his left forearm

Misc

  • His tail is about eight feet long, usually knotted around his waist
  • His body temperature is uncomfortably high

Surroundings

  • Wind gusts with every step he takes
  • The area around him is slightly more static-y than normal
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Praetorum's jaw dropped, his whole body seizing up. He couldn't even cry out, his throat too tight to get out a single sound as every fiber of his being crackled and buzzed with power, burning from within. He could barely breath, there was too much in his chest, filling up everything in him, pressing his heart and lungs against his ribcage as something expanded underneath his sternum. He could see nothing but blue behind his eyes, the color of sunlight seen through a clear slat of ice.

It was too much; it wasn't enough. It felt like someone had sliced open his belly, gutted him, and was now stuffing him like a dormouse. To describe it as painful would be like describing a battleship as a pile of damp wood; technically accurate, but missed the scale and intricacy of it by a mile. Lightning was filling every crevasse of his body, coursing through his blood; and something within him was reaching out for it, greedy and desperate, drinking in every last drop.


He had no concept of how long he spent in that state, only in the span of a breath, it had receded into him, leaving him huddled on the ground, gasping for breath. Rolling over, he pressed his hand to his chest, still wheezing slightly. Sitting by his side, Edyn patted his shoulder, relief in every line of her face. "Congratulations." She told him, smiling. "You're a runewrite now." 


Praetorum stared up at the moons, heartrate slowing as he recovered from the intensity of his initiation. 


He'd expected to feel different. Becoming a mage seemed like the sort of thing that should change a man dramatically. Instead, Praetorum mostly just felt exhausted, and slightly itchy from the grasses prodding at his back. "I feel like I've been marching all trial." He mumbled. 


Edyn smiled wanly. "I know what you mean." When she raised a hand to run through her hair, he saw her fingers were trembling. "But we're both alive and unharmed, so I'd call this a success." 


"Very reassuring." He mumbled. 


"I did tell you that you might not survive." She leaned over, nudging his chest with her elbow. "Come on, let's have a look at that witchmark."
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Let's play 'What's Weird About Prae'

Head

  • A fiery rune shines under his right eye
  • A firey glow in the back of his mouth

Arms

  • A ring of blue runes floats over each of Prae's wrists
  • A silver shield marks the back of his right hand
  • A ring of light around his left forearm

Misc

  • His tail is about eight feet long, usually knotted around his waist
  • His body temperature is uncomfortably high

Surroundings

  • Wind gusts with every step he takes
  • The area around him is slightly more static-y than normal
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It was very strange, to look down at his chest and see a shape there, softly glowing an icy blue over his chest, just beneath his silver circle. "Huh." Edyn commented, and placed her fingers against it. To Praetorum, it didn't seem like anything was happening, but Edyn's face softened in sympathy. "You've had it rough, haven't you?" Praetorum frowned, uncertain how to take that, and Edyn took his hand in hers, gently bringing it up to her forehead, so his fingers brushed against the rune half hidden under her bangs. 


Praetorum gasped, information and understanding flooding into his mind. Worry, protectiveness, boundless curiosity, a need to see the world, pushing and pulling with the desperate desire for home, belonging, family; Edyn carried all of this within her, and more. He felt like he was peering into her soul, like he was mapping out an imprint of everything she was through his fingers. And he realized too, that she had seen just as deeply into him when she had touched his mark, and shied away, embarrassed or afraid or upset about having been laid bare before her. 


"It's a bond between the two of us, only." She reassured him, understanding his reticence without words, just as he understood the soothing intent behind her words without either of them having to say anything. "But that rune for you, just as this is for me, is a rune of naming; I drew it, but it took on its own shape, its own meaning, to fit you." She touched his hand again, giving it a gentle squeeze. "There is no hiding who we are from each other, and—" she smiled softly at him"—now that I've seen who you are, I know I've made the right choice in choosing you. And I hope that having seen me, you feel that you've made the right choice in trusting me." 


He did. She was earnest, and clever, and as honest as any Ithecal. And if she was asking him to trust her, he would.

He had little else to guide him.

Praetorum blinked when Edyn turned away, grabbing something from her pack. "Here." She told him, pressing a book into his hand. He looked down at it, blinking. "It's a grimoire. Well, right now it's a plain blank book, but it *will* be a grimoire. It's for you, to record runes as you learn them, and the ways you can use and chain them." He took it gently from her, running his fingers over the cover. The book was a slim volume that could easily fit in a saddlebag; it was unassuming, but sturdy—made to travel. "Mine's a little smaller, but you know. Given the differences in size between us..." Edyn shrugged. "Come here, I'll teach you your first rune. "

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Let's play 'What's Weird About Prae'

Head

  • A fiery rune shines under his right eye
  • A firey glow in the back of his mouth

Arms

  • A ring of blue runes floats over each of Prae's wrists
  • A silver shield marks the back of his right hand
  • A ring of light around his left forearm

Misc

  • His tail is about eight feet long, usually knotted around his waist
  • His body temperature is uncomfortably high

Surroundings

  • Wind gusts with every step he takes
  • The area around him is slightly more static-y than normal
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This was a tidy little initiation thread. You mispelled runewright runewrite, but that's a minor mistake.

The chemistry between Prae and this npc is pretty nicely written. There was a lot of internal narrative, dialogue and thought processes represented here, not every thread has to have a ton of action and fireworks. Good initation thread!

I've given you full points for magic, because it's an initiation and those tend to be intense and indepth enough to warrant the full credit. I felt like this thread fit the bill.

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10 (These points can be used for magic)

Knowledge

Detection: The usefulness of the Rune of Sight and the Rune of Sound
Tactics: Enhanced hearing could help in combat
Hone: The initiation process
Hone: The bond between initiate and initiator
Hone: The rune of naming
Endurance: Dealing with the pain of initiation

Loot

Nope

Wealth

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