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Kasoria
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sat Mar 16, 2019 6:21 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: We Gonna Rock Down To...
City/Area: Volta, South-West Rharne
Notes/Warnings: Foul Language

Just some narrative getting Kasoria a passage back home... or, at least, putting him in a position to secure it. You'll have to forgive me, this takes for granted a couple of stories and events already being completed (namely a couple of bounty hunting threads that are ongoing), but I don't think I stretched credulity at all.

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Intelligence: Spreading Word in Taverns and Pubs
Negotiation: Offering a Deal that Saves the Other Party Money
Negotiation: Sweetening a Deal with an Incentive
Negotiation: When One Offer Fails, Try Another
Persuasion: Using an Official Document to Vouch for You
Philosophy: The Curious Hypocrisy of Legalized Murder, a.k.a. Bounty Hunting


Non-Skill Knowledge:
"The Captain": Crusty, Cunning, and Veteran Sailor
Location: Volta: Storm-Wracked and Lightning-Charged Seaside Town, Rharne
Location: The Spires: Volta's Towering and Terrifying Lightning-based Defenses


Loot: A small purse left with the captain as an additional incentive

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"This is the life we choose, the life we lead. And there is only one guarantee: none of us will see Heaven."
NOTE: Kasoria is using the name "Thagoras" while in Eastern Idalos, from Zi'da 717 onwards
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Varthakh
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sat Mar 16, 2019 3:10 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Low-key Lost Loque Lol
City/Area: The Ashvane Estate, The Gleam, Quacia
Notes/Warnings: None, Fridgar was tame
Requested Rewards:
Fridgar:
Knowledge:
  1. Detection: The scent of someone familiar.
  2. Detection: Nervous tics in an Ithecal's tail movements.
  3. Detection: Determining if it's light or dark by how others tread.
  4. Discipline: Not saying what you're thinking if it's rude.
  5. Discipline: Remembering your surroundings while blindfolded.
  6. Discipline:
  7. Meditation: Reflecting on yourself.
  8. Meditation: Recognizing your inner struggle.
  9. Meditation: Staying your bubble of anger when it creeps up on you before it becomes a problem.
  10. Meditation: Talking helps to calm your sick mind.
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  • Loque: Returned after staying with Rhostus for a while
  • Loque: Was afraid of you briefly
  • Loque: Has faith in you
  • Loque: Ever Quiet
  • Loque: You will introduce her to your family.
Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: None
Renown: None
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No


Loque:
Knowledge:
  1. Discipline: Walking forward when your instinct tells you not to
  2. Discipline: Exercising caution when approaching uncertain situations
  3. Detection: Noticing dramatic changes in one's appearance
  4. Discipline: Staying when you do not want to
  5. Discipline: Containing your excitement
  6. Meditation: Giving time for an inward perspective on information given before responding
  7. Discipline: Doing as one is told, even if it might become detrimental to one's self
  8. Ettiquet: Knowing the relationship of slave and master
  9. Discipline: Not showing one's fear
  10. Detection: Picking up on emotional influences and reasoning for actions
Non-skill:
  • Hone: has destructive(Umbral) and Restorative(Lucis) variations
  • Fridgar: Is changing because of Hone
  • Fridgar: Has a mate and child
  • Fridgar: Fierce defender of his family
  • Fridgar: Jealous, but compassionate
  • Bellator: Fridgar's son
  • Spark: Source of magic
  • Spark: Corrupts and breaks the soul?
  • Spark: Grows the more it is used
  • Spark: Can have more than one?
  • Spark: Must be given by someone else who has it
  • Fridgar: wears a blindfold now
  • Fridgar: Thinks himself a monster
  • Fridgar: Trusts Loque?
Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: None
Renown: None
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No
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Llyr Llywelyn
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sat Mar 16, 2019 3:45 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Again, Again
City/Area: Quacia, The Gleam
Notes/Warnings: N/A

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Strength: No breaks between repetitions exhausts muscles over time.
Strength: Putting your strength into a movement.
Strength: Acrobatics Builds Muscle.
Strength: Using your weight to increase your pushing power.
Climbing: Balancing on a narrow horizontal beam.
Climbing: Finding an easy path down a building's side from a rooftop.

Personal: My Spark and I.

Loot: N/A
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: N/A
Wealth Points: N/A

Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: No
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Etzos

The following visuals are not applicable in the Etzos territory during Ymiden: Gossamer Wings, Halo.

Eyes

Llyr's eyes are constantly changing based on a blend of his emotions.
When an emotion dominates, the pigment expands past his irises to the entire eye - faintly glowing in that emotion's color.
See Color References here.

Mutations

  • Gossamer wings resembling a cross between the wings of a dragonfly and a flying ant.
  • An iridescent halo that hovers over his head.
  • Crystalline legs from his toes to the mid of his thighs (like stockings made of quartz embedded into his skin).
  • An ever-moving inky tattoo, with Rorschach-like designs, on his back.

Scars

Llyr currently has 8 major scars, referenced on his CS.
Most noticeable is two parallel lines, with an triangular arrow point connecting them, on the center of his forehead.

Totems

When in a totem's body, Llyr's mutations persist but his scars do not.
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Zasalamir
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sat Mar 16, 2019 7:36 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Shouldering the Consequences
City/Area: Ne'haer
Notes/Warnings: Was abandoned by me v.v
Requested Rewards:

Discipline: Waiting Patiently for another to arrive
Discipline: Knowing when and what to say at the right time
Discipline: Trying not to offend another
Discipline: Showing up on time
Meditation: Singing to keep one's mind clear
Meditation: Don’t let nerves sway you from your path
Socialization: Getting other's point of view
Socialization: Making Conversation with another
Socialization: Asking another's name
Etiquette: Introductions are key



Collaboration: (Yes)
Magic Experience?: (No)
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Nasod
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sun Mar 17, 2019 3:44 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: A Serpent Strikes an Ursine
City/Area: The Lair, Quacia
Notes/Warnings: Nude Training
Requested Rewards:
Dosan
Blades{Dao Sword}: Is the perfect weapon for close quarter fighting
Blades{Dao Sword}: Is deadly in the right hands
Blades{Dao Sword}: Reverse grip
Discipline: Holding back the need to cry
Strength: Forcing an opponent to the ground
Endurance: Continuing to fight despite being in pain
Endurance: Getting back up after a heavy blow
Tactics: Using a larger foe's weight against them
Stealth: Staying outside your opponent's field of vision
Deception: Crocodile tears
Unarmed Combat{Fěnsuìle}: When in a bind fight dirty
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Fridgar: Has scars all over his body
Fridgar: Is very very heavy
Fridgar: Fights Blindfolded
Fridgar: Has been kicked in the balls before
Fridgar: Isn't mad at me for kicking him in the balls
Fridgar: Wants to teach me in Becoming
Fridgar
Axes & Bludgeons: [War Ax]: Parrying the strike of a sword aimed at your leg.
Axes & Bludgeons: [War Ax]: Basic offensive stance
Axes & Bludgeons: [War Ax]: Basic defensive stance
Axes & Bludgeons: [War Ax]: Parrying the strike of a sword aimed at your back
Axes & Bludgeons: [War Ax]: Quickly turning on the spot to face your enemy leaves you vulnerable and off balance.
Deception: Feigning pain.
Deception: Blindfolding yourself to make your enemy think you're weaker
Deception: Throwing a fight.
Deception: Feigning carnal desire
Dual Wielding: War Ax x War Ax
Seduction: A good way to lul your opponent into a false sense of security
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Dosan: Trains a lot in the fighting pits
Dosan: Embarrassed of being naked for some reason
Dosan: Trains naked
Dosan: Cried because you overpowered him?
Dosan: Kicked you in the balls
Dosan: Helped you after kicking you in the balls
Injuries/Overstepping: (If applicable)
Renown: +5 if someone just happens to see two naked men sparring

Collaboration: (Yes)
Magic Experience?: (No)
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Kesindir
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sun Mar 17, 2019 1:54 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Killer Queen - Gator Aide
City/Area: Scalvoris - Surrounding areas
Notes/Warnings: Mild language, some violence
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Skill Knowledge:
Ranged Combat: (Shortbow) Focus on the target
Endurance: Pain of a shield bash
Endurance: Pain of broken ribs
Discipline: Staying focused despite pain
Animal Husbandry: (King Croc) Understanding a cry for help
Animal Husbandry: (King Croc) Likes fish
Loot: +1 King Croc purchased here
Injuries/Overstepping: Bruises that’ll heal in four to five trials. Broken ribs (2) will heal in 60-80 trials without medical assistance.
Renown: 5 - 10 for killing two thwarthides
Wealth Points: None
Collaboration: Nope
Magic Experience?: No
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Kesindir: "Spoken word in Rakahi"
"Spoken word in Common"
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Others: "Spoken word"


"I went to the woods because I wished to live deliberately, to front only the essential facts of life, and see if I could not learn what it had to teach, and not, when I came to die, discover that I had not lived....I wanted to live deep and suck out all the marrow of life." ~ Henry David Thoreau
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Ari'sora
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sun Mar 17, 2019 6:12 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Defense 101
City/Area: Scalvoris, Beacon
Notes/Warnings: Very mild swearing.
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Skill Knowledges

Flying: flapping vigorously will strengthen wing muscles
Ranged Combat; Shortbow: has more uses than just killing people
Ranged Combat; Shortbow: parts of a short bow
Ranged Combat; Shortbow: parts of an arrow
Ranged Combat; Shortbow: how to nock an arrow
Unarmed Combat; Brawling: shouldn't be attempted when heavily pregnant

Non Skill Knowledges

Ari'sora: loves watching the wind

Loot: none
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: none
Wealth Points: none
- If you are claiming Wealth Points, please link to your Wealth Thread for this season, as Wealth Points can not be awarded before this is completed:
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
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Alistair
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Profession: Wanderer
Renown: +1000 +
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Sun Mar 17, 2019 9:56 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Dead Or Not
City/Area: Quacia
Notes/Warnings: Nu
Requested Rewards:

Alistair
Knowledge:
Hone: Rune of Focus
Hone: Spoken Trigger
Hone: Placing Runes onto allies
Hone: My Purifier spark allows me to enhance thralls
Hone: The Purifier spark is naturally aligned with me
Meditation: Experiencing a Spark's imprinted memories

Loot: Nu
Injuries/Overstepping: Nu
Renown: Nu
Wealth Points: Nu

Collaboration: Nu
Magic Experience?: Yes, for Hone. Alistair learned a new rune and discovered/explored his new mutation, as well as learning a new ability (Spoken Trigger).
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Abaddon
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Mon Mar 18, 2019 4:14 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Boring Research
City/Area: Quacia
Notes/Warnings: Job Thread

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Attunement: Some Notes Difficult To Identify
Alchemy: Wearing Protective Garb
Alchemy: The Signs Of Magical Volatility
Alchemy: Using Filtration To Isolate Properties
Alchemy: Using Distillation To Isolate Properties
Alchemy: Failing At Isolating Magic From Blood

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Attunement Note: Blood
Attunement Note: Pure Water

Loot:
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: N/A
Wealth Points: N/A

Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: Yes, Attunement. Abaddon overstepped trying to Identify and listen to Notes that were beyond his skill level.
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Re: Review Request 2.2.0

Mon Mar 18, 2019 4:21 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Useful
City/Area: Quacia
Notes/Warnings: Job Thread

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Attunement: Actively Measuring Changes In Notes
Alchemy: Primer
Alchemy: Hardener
Alchemy: Binder
Alchemy: Cloth As A Receiving Material
Alchemy: Making Embersteel Fabric As Light As Feathers
.
Attunement Note: Hardness
Attunement Note: Density
Attunement Note: Melting Point

Loot:
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: 15, for inventing a highly desired Alchemically altered fabric?
Wealth Points: N/A

Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: Yes, Attunement. Abaddon observed Notes in a way he hasn't before.
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