Arriving in Yaralon

[Kira]

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[Mads]

Kira

Knowledge.........

Discipline: doing what it takes to reach your goal
Meditation: calmly accepting that some things won't change
Necromancy: sap lets me drain energy from my target
Necromancy: I can eat raw meat without penalty
Fieldcraft: makeshift shelter
Butchering: tearing off fur by hand

Yaralon: the run
Yaralon: the silver mark

Loot....................

None

Consequence......

Light Overstepping: for the next ten days, Kira will be exceptionally hungry. Blood, especially, will be extra quenching, but only while she's drinking it.

Renown..............

None

Experience...........

10 - Novice Necromancy

Hm, grammatically much better, but otherwise... your writing of magic is extremely basic, which makes it feel more like a listing of things rather than using magic. Feel free to put in a little more detail, especially when raising fetches. There were a lot of missed opportunities in just writing a short solo to get to Yaralon, but nothing was technically wrong. I did like her weird little fight with the animal, though if it was difficult for her to control the four at once, having them jump in unison immediately after writing that detail didn't make a lot of sense.

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