Review Request Thread 2.1.8

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Kasoria
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Wed Dec 26, 2018 7:31 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Vacancy -- Demigods Required
City/Area: Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Language and Violence

This was supposed to go into way more detail, of course, but Oberan needed to duck out for RL stuff. He told me he wouldn't be coming back for a while, and I'm not a fan of sitting around waiting. So, gonna wrap this up myself, I hope the last two posts do the job well enough. Lemme know if they do, and thanks!

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Detection: Recognizing Your Contact
Intelligence: Knowing a Man's Habits to Find His Weaknesses
Intimidation: Pain Focuses a Victim's Attention (in the correct dose)
Intimidation: Formless and Shapeless... Save for a Voice
Persuasion: The Threat of Scandal
Philosophy: No Sympathy for the Stupidly, Self-Destructively Proud
Stealth: No Sudden Moves
Tactics: Snaring a Man with Blackmail and Debt
Throwing (Knives): Judging Distance Before a Throw
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq): Liver Shot


Non-Skill Knowledge:
Etzos: Network of Sewer Tunnels Under the Whole City
NPC Cecil Rodson: City Revenue Officer, Gambler, New "Asset" of Bangun Vorund
NPC Trell: Commercial Circle Racketeer


Renown: (how much and for what?)
Collaboration: Yes, technically

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Navyri
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Wed Dec 26, 2018 3:34 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Always a Romantic
City/Area: It's a "story" written by Navyri, with suggestion of it taking place in Scalvoris outlining a crime she may have committed (or is planning to).
Notes/Warnings: Written in first person as a love letter, I liked the idea of it being a journal entry with plausible deniability. Wanted to just play around with perspective and personality, but I had fun writing this.
Requested Rewards: 10xp
Knowledge wrote:Poison: The Properties of Nightshade
Poison: How Nightshade Affects the Body
Poison: How to Create a Deadly Powder
Cosmetology: The Use of Nightshade in Cosmetics
Cosmetology: Nightshade Dilates the Pupils
Storytelling: First Person Perspective
Loot: A little story in the form of a letter.
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: Nothing, unless published.
Collaboration: No

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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Wed Dec 26, 2018 7:52 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Enemies
City/Area: Wilderness forum, Central, small village
Notes/Warnings: Varlum says a few bad words
Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Strength: Pushing forward to stop a shove
Strength: Forcing a sword from a mans hand
Strength: Lifting an Embersteel coated weapon
Strength: Swinging around a heavy weapon
Endurance: Holding a sharp blade
Endurance: Being pushed hard

Loot: A sweet ass Axe
Injuries/Overstepping: Small cut on hand, heals in a few days
Renown: 5 for being heroic and badass
Collaboration: Nope

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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Wed Dec 26, 2018 9:48 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Crocodile Tears
City/Area: A now ruined village, Central Reservation
Notes/Warnings: Violence, cursing, sadness
Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Strength: Pushing your injured body to its feet
Strength: Biting hard in to a mans shoulder
Strength: Pushing yourself up when buried in rubble
Strength: Tearing a chunk out of a man
Endurance: Thrown through a building
Endurance: Buried in rubble

Loot: Nope
Injuries/Overstepping: Easily 30 trials of healing, even with the medical help
Renown: 10/15 for saving a whole village and surviving, even if people did die
Collaboration: No

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Max
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Fri Dec 28, 2018 12:03 am

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Thread Name: Masks Come Off
City/Area: Rynmere
Notes/Warnings: Violence.
Requested Rewards:
Rey'na:
Discipline: Stay calm to ease someone's anger
Discipline: Letting yourself feel is ok
Discipline: Living without emotions is still living
Discipline: Admitting to mistakes
Endurance: Slammed in to a wall
Endurance: Knife to the neck

Max:
Acting: Feigning Indifference
Acting: Playing the Traitor
Acting: Breaking Character
Acting: Returning to Character
Deception: Reverse Psychology
Interrogation: Demanding Answers at Knife Point
Tactics: Planning a Jailbreak
Tactics: Assessing Physical Attributes of an Enemy

Loot: N/A
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: N/A
Collaboration: Yes

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Tio Silver
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Fri Dec 28, 2018 10:46 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Departure
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: No
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: None
Loot: No
Injuries/Overstepping: No
Renown: No
Collaboration: No

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Some strange little quirks your character can notice when threading with Tio.

Missing Eye

Tio lost his right eye, and has a nasty looking scar where it used to be. This scar serves as Cassion's curse mark, but has the side of effect of allowing Tio to see strands of faintly glowing words made of light surrounding people who will be part of a story in the future. He wears an eyepatch to cover this eye up.

Terrible Shirt

Tio wears perhaps the most horribly ostentatious jacket on Idalos. It is magically enchanted to make him feel good as long as he wears it, but is so awful that most people can't help but cringe.

Skeletal Shadow

The shadow Tio casts is that of a skeleton. It looks pretty spooky, but doesn't really do anything special.

Cold Wind

A gentle breeze of slightly chilly wind clings to Tio, following him wherever he goes.

Magic Jewelry

Tio wears a range of jewelry with assorted magic effects. See the character sheet for more details.
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Faith
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Sat Dec 29, 2018 4:46 pm

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Thread Name: Seeking Help
City/Area: Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: No
Requested Rewards:
Lei'lira:
Caregiving: how to change a diaper
Caregiving: don't rely on smell to know when a diaper needs changing; check several times a trial
Caregiving: balancing the needs of twins
Caregiving: patience is essential
Caregiving: time management is critical when dealing with children
Caregiving: letting young children "help" is important because it lets them feel useful
Endurance: dealing with three young children at once
Medicine: the signs of diaper rash
Medicine: chafing and diaper rash can be prevented by changing soiled diapers as soon as they are soiled
Meditation: it isn't possible to be in a state of panic and relaxed at the same time

Non-Skill:
Tiran: loves the sound of Lei'lira's voice
Taerin: loves the sound of Lei'lira's voice

Faith:
Meditation: How to lead a meditation
Meditation: Your sense of calm is important
Psychology: Treating a friend for psychological trauma can be difficult.
Psychology: Treating panic attacks
Psychology: Treating flashbacks
Psychology: Setting the scene in a psychological therapy
Rhetoric: Guided visualizations
Sevrath Ability: Calming Minds: Needs long term commitment.
Sevrath Ability: Calming Minds: Requires touch to work.


Loot: No
Injuries/Overstepping: No
Renown: No
Collaboration: No

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Tio Silver
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Sat Dec 29, 2018 5:24 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: Fading Away
City/Area: Almund
Notes/Warnings: None
Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: None
Loot: None
Injuries/Overstepping: None
Renown: None
Collaboration: No

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Fast Facts
Some strange little quirks your character can notice when threading with Tio.

Missing Eye

Tio lost his right eye, and has a nasty looking scar where it used to be. This scar serves as Cassion's curse mark, but has the side of effect of allowing Tio to see strands of faintly glowing words made of light surrounding people who will be part of a story in the future. He wears an eyepatch to cover this eye up.

Terrible Shirt

Tio wears perhaps the most horribly ostentatious jacket on Idalos. It is magically enchanted to make him feel good as long as he wears it, but is so awful that most people can't help but cringe.

Skeletal Shadow

The shadow Tio casts is that of a skeleton. It looks pretty spooky, but doesn't really do anything special.

Cold Wind

A gentle breeze of slightly chilly wind clings to Tio, following him wherever he goes.

Magic Jewelry

Tio wears a range of jewelry with assorted magic effects. See the character sheet for more details.
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Yrmellyn Cole
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Sun Dec 30, 2018 10:05 pm

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: The Thief Who Stole Zida
City/Area: Rharne
Notes/Warnings: The PC Vincent is being retired and in an ooc message in his last post the player gave me permission to wrap it up on my own. I've done so,
Requested Rewards:
Deception: To pretend to mistake a general greeting for a pick-up line
Deception: To pretend to be interested in someone
Tactics: Planning to fool someone in order to get rid of them
Psychology: Calming down after a weird meeting by making tea
Psychology: Using painting to escape troublesome thoughts
Cooking: Making tea and toast
Loot: One empty sack
Injuries/Overstepping: N/A
Renown: N/A
Collaboration: Yes

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Kasoria
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Re: Review Request Thread 2.1.8

Tue Jan 01, 2019 1:20 am

Rewards Requested
Thread Name: I. From The Clear Blue Sky
City/Area: Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Strong Language

And here it is: the beginning of the ending, as it were. Gonna be a three-parter, and I STRONGLY recommend the same person review all three, or it's not gonna read even half as well. Enjoy!

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:
Detection: Noticing When Someone's Sweating Far More than they Should Be
Detection: Following a Significant Glance
Discipline: Sacrificing Conversation for Attentiveness
Philosophy: Some Men are Brawn, Some are Brains
Tactics: Protective Formation for a Small Group of Bodyguards
Unarmed Combat (Ki'Enaq): Wrist Lock and Disarm


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