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Tristan Venora
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Re: The Anatomy of a Funeral Pyre

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Gangui:

Knowledge:
Detection: Spotting Someone In the Darkness
Discipline: Holding one's tongue
Persuasion: Kill them with respect
Leadership: Maintaining Discipline in Foreign lands
Rhetoric: The Soft version of a message
Endurance: Working hard even after the run
Discipline: Holding a straight face
Detection: Finding Witchbrands
Politics: Etzori Goals in Yaralon

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Renown: 5
Magic XP: N/A

Points: 15

Cervantez:

Knowledge:
Investigation: Small details can be incredibly important
Investigation: Checking a dead body for clues
Socialization: Trying not to get in the way
Socialization: Always look someone in the eyes
Socialization: Offering Assistance to Others
Discipline: Being respectful despite disagreeing
Leadership: Commanding Animals
Stealth: Approaching an encampment without being herd
Persuasion: convincing a man to follow with a wave of a finger

Loot: N/A
Injuries: N/A
Renown: 5
Magic XP: N/A

Points: 15
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Comments: This was an interesting meeting between two very different PCs. I enjoyed reading about the funeral tradition of Etzos and what the people of Yaralon do with their dead – and why they do it.

Gangui, your writing was clear and detailed, and your posts were easy to read. There were no issues as far as grammar, spelling etc. that really caught my eye apart from one that was probably just a typo. You should state the exact date though – and the arc.

Cervantez, your posts were quite good as well and contained just a few small errors. I especially enjoyed your PC’s observation on how fleeting life is. Please consider separating your posts into several paragraphs rather than posting one huge paragraph though. Doing such would make them much easier to read.

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