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Sera Altira

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Name Sera Altira
Race: Eidisi
DoB: 8th of Vhalar, 685
Title: The Inquisitor of Bracken Post
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  • Detection - 80 (Expert)
  • Investigation - 70 (Competent)
  • Linguistics - 70 (Competent)
  • Interrogation - 40 (Competent)
  • Intelligence - 20 (Novice)
  • Unarmed Combat (Brawling) - 20 (Novice)
Sera came to Rharne as a young woman with a simple goal in mind: to become the best inquisitor of all the Lightning Knights. Her keen Eidisi mind gave her a natural edge at deductive work, however it soon become apparent that her racial arrogance and lack of empathy were holding her back. As great as she was at logical thinking and puzzle solving, she was next to useless at working as part of a team. She was the kind of person who thought nothing of belittling her peers for even the slightest mistake and never gave praise where it was due. For that reason her applications for positions of serior rank were denied. Sera, unable to accept what she percieved as mass jealousy towards her superior intellect, continued to complain though official channels that she was being unfairly treated and caused many high ranking members a lot of administrative nuisance.

Sera was assigned to work in Bracken Post: a guard post in the Earth Quarter that bordered the Dust Quarter. Bracken Post was known among the Lightning Knights as the place to assign potential troublemakers who need to be forgotten, and Sera realised that this was effectively a career ending move. The shock of it dealt quite a blow to Sera's psyche. She lost all motivation to achieve her dream, becoming a bitter and cynical inquisitor who could rarely be moved to do more than the bare minimum level of work needed to keep her job.

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Last edited by Odd Mercuriavellie on Thu Feb 04, 2021 8:44 pm, edited 2 times in total. word count: 288
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Re: Sera Altira

Heya Odd,

So there's a slight issue with the backstory on this npc, she'd likely be fired from the Knights, if not arrested for tampering with case files. Could you amend that part of her history?
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Re: Sera Altira

Done.
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Re: Sera Altira

Heya Odd,

I'm still having trouble justifying this part of her backstory.
Sera began to deliberately give out minor bits of misinformation to other knights working on the same cases as her to slow them down so that she could get the credit, but was reported to her superiors. No condemning evidence was found linking Sera to this crime, meaning she could not be formally punished, but it was clear to everyone from the way that she acted that Sera was guilty.

Maybe it'd be best to leave out any mention of wrong-doing, and maybe she just got demoted for underperforming?

The thing about this is, any ranking Inquisitor would be able to find out that she wasn't telling the truth, and if they got a whiff of what she had done, they would be able to find out. How is that, you might wonder. Let me direct your attention to the Inquisitor Rewards from the Lightning Knight Write-up:
Inquisitors: Whisperwill - The Whisperwill comes in the form of a large silver and amethyst ring that is worn on the thumb. It will glow very faintly when you are standing in the presence of someone who is intentionally and specifically trying to decieve you. This tool is invaluable when suspects are being questioned. The Whisperwill can be confused at times if the individual does not does not truly understand that they are lying, in these cases the ring can give false readings.

Inquisitors - Memory Playback Crystal: Sometimes, it helps an Inquistor to be able to view things as they happened, rather than simply relying on stressed memories. These crystals were made to fill that exact niche, allowing whoever is holding them to draw themselves and the people around them into a memory. These memories can be repeated at will, allowing the Inquisitor to gain evidence that might otherwise be forgotten or lost, though the memory has to be played willingly.
So you see, even a somewhat intermediate Inquisitor would be able to find out about what she'd done, and she would likely get thrown in jail or out of the LK at the very least.
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Re: Sera Altira

Okay, that's a fair comment.
Pig Boy wrote: Thu Feb 04, 2021 7:01 pm Maybe it'd be best to leave out any mention of wrong-doing, and maybe she just got demoted for underperforming?
I see what you mean, but the impression I'm trying to get across is that this is a character who is highly capable in terms of skills, but has an absolutely rotten personality. With that in mind I've edited it to replace her commiting any actually crimes, to her being the absolute worst team-player you could possible imagine. Would that be more suitable?
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Re: Sera Altira

Sounds good, and thanks! Approved and sorry about the delay!
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