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Things Unsaid

33rd of Saun, 713

“Kali! Kali! Wake up!”

“Kor, it’s not even daylight yet! If yer cravin’ fish so bad then jump off—“

“My stomach hurts.”

“I’m up! Sit. Where does it hurt?”

“Dunno, just in my stomach…I—I didn’t wanna wake up, Rivan…again.”

“Is yer brain water logged?! Get ‘im up first!”

“Don’t be yelling at me when half the ships asleep!”

“Then don’t be—oh my Immortal! Stop cryin’ Kor, I didn’t mean it, c’mere.”

“I’m—I’m scared, Kali.”

“Here, blow yer nose on my shirt ya baby. We’ll wake ma up—“

“Don’t!”

“For the love of U’frek Kor, then whadda want me to do?”

“I dunno.”

“U’frek save us all from expectin’ woman.”

“Don’t go teasing me like ya ain’t gonna be just as bad!”

“No one is gonna be as dramatic as ya, trust me, now how long its been hurtin’?”

“…since dinner.”

“Korva!”

“I didn’t wanna jinx it! What if it’s just ‘cause we ate too much? Or—“

“We need to get ya to a doctor—“

“But what if it ain’t nothing? I—Kali! Kali—it hurts again!”

“Squeeze my hand, ya ain’t gonna break it—there ya go—we’re gettin’ ma now—“

“Don’t ya dare leave me here!”

“Well ya ain’t gonna make it up ‘em stairs!”

“Would ya both shut up?!”

“Oh now yer awake! Ya sleep like a dead man, Kam, stay with ‘er while I get ma.”

“Whats goin’ on?”

“Kali! U’freks balls it hurts more! Kali!”

“Yer gonna break my hand!”

“But it hurts!”

“So does my hand!”

“Ya said it weren’t gonna break!”

“I lied—“

“Kor yer bleedin’!”

“Don’t tell ‘er, Kam!”

“I—wha—why—why ya didn’t tell me?!”

“Don’t start crying—damn it, Kam, thats why I didn’t tell ‘er!”

“Well, ya didn’t tell me not to!“

“Just go get ma!”

“Fine!”
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“Shh, love, it’ll be fine. Doctors comin’.”

“Don’t tell Rivan!”

“He’s already up—“

“Then he ain’t coming in! I don’t wanna tell ‘im I did it again!”

“Ya ain’t done nothin’, cuttlefish, stop that—“

“It ain’t fair!”

“Now ya done it, ma! Kor stop shrieking already or the doctor can’t talk to ya!”

“Don’t yell at her, Kamina!”

“Don’t yell at me!”

“Would ya both stop it?!”

“All of you out except the patient!”

“I ain’t gonna leave ‘er like this!”

“You’re the one making her ‘like this’, now get out till I’m finished examining her and can calm her down.”

“I’m her—“

“Just c’mere ma, Kor ain’t even payin’ attention.”

“Kalis’ right, while she ain’t lookin’ or we’ll never leave.”

“I’m comin’ back right after, ya hear?”

“Of course you are ma’am, now out—Miss? Miss Korva, was it? I need you to breathe with me—yes, just like that—in slowly, out slowly and see how many fingers I’ve got?”

“F—five.”

“Good girl, now your…family has already told me whats going on and what happened before, I’m going to need you to—“

“It’s happening again, ain’t it? I did it again, ain’t I? Why am I—I can’t—why don’t it hurt anymore?!”

“Calm down! Breathe!”

“I—I—I am!”

“Slower. Now. In for four and out for four…count them with me—good, two three and out, now again…feel better?”

“No.”

“Well do it anyway and lean back for me, I need to check.”

“Whacha think yer gonna find? I ain’t—“

“Lay down, Kor.”

“Sir, you need to leave—“

“Get outta here, Rivan—leggo my hand—no! Don’t hug me ya—ya—“

“Breathe, Kor—there ya go love, lay down with me—just like we’re going to sleep, ‘right?”

“Can you keep her still?”

“I can—I’m here, Kor. Yer fine, love, we’re fine—“

“Sorry—I’m sorry, I’m sorry—“

“Shh, stop apologizing or ya'll make me cry too, love, shh.”
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“Is she gonna be alright?”

“Physically she should be, but sometime after she should come to the Order so we can sort the whole thing out fully. Emotionally—“

“I can hear ya.”

“Shush, Kor.”

“As I was saying, emotionally you know her best, keep an eye and you have problems you know where to find me. Now she’ll bleed for a few days—“

“I know how it works. I wanna sleep now.”

“Ya need to listen to ‘im, Kor—“

“No. I don’t. Ya go listen to ‘im, Kam, then ya can learn what not to do while ya get outta my bed.”

“That’s Kalis bed ya—“

“Shut up, Kam, lets go, we’ll finish it on deck.”

“She can’t just—“

“Kamina!”

“Fine. It ain’t helpin’ her to baby her Kali and ya know it.”

“I’ll be in touch.”

“Rather ya didn’t—Rivan yer hands are cold.”

“Then snuggle closer and keep them warm.”

“Don’t wanna.”

“Kor—“

“Just—just lets sleep, ‘kay?”

“…Whatever ya want, love.”

“…can ya hold me.”

“‘Course, love, always gonna hold ya.”

“…and ya ain’t mad?”

“I could never mad at ya, Kor, not for this.”

“‘Kay.”

“Get some sleep and we’ll take a hot bath in the mornin’.”

“Yer getting the water warmed up.”

“Don’t push it.”

“Love ya.”

“Love ya too, love ya even more if ya sleep.”

“Mm."

"Just like that, love, we'll be alright in the mornin'. Promise ya."
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Phew. That was probably one of the few threads I've read where my heart broke. Even if this is all pure dialogue, you can feel the heartache in their words. Even if this has happened to Korva before, it still absolutely crushes her it's happening again. You painted a picture only using spoken word and that isn't something easily done. Well done, and I do hope things start to look up for poor Korva. She's been through so much, the poor girl. Enjoy your rewards!

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