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Clean and Teach
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Amaterasu
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Clean and Teach
Last edited by Amaterasu on Tue Dec 08, 2020 5:04 pm, edited 3 times in total. word count: 11
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Re: Clean and Teach
Amaterasu
Experience: 10 these points may be used for necromancy xp.
Knowledge:
Necromancy 2
Teaching 1
Endurance 1
Socialization 2
Renown: none
Skill Usage: Appropriate to level.
Loot/Losses: none
Injuries/Conditions: none
Consequences: none
Comments: I checked with the Rharne mods to see if there'd been an earthquake around this date on the calendar. There wasn't. I realize you were probably trying to give your character something to do, but please refrain from conjuring a major geological event in memory unless it exists in the calendar for that memory in that location.
I have to be honest, I found it difficult to follow the text and plot of this solo. Is there a reason that Amaterasu is vomiting so often?
There are sections at the end where you seem to copy-paste an entire paragraph. When removed the text still comes to 1500 roughly.
If you have any concerns about this review, please PM me about them.
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