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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: Belt Up
City/Area: Rharne, Stormlands
Notes/Warnings:
Skills Used: Fieldcraft (exp), Detection (comp), Discipline (nov), Leatherworking (mas), Cooking (comp), Needlecraft (nov), Animal Husbandry (comp), Endurance (nov)

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Needlecraft: threading a needle
Leatherworking: shaving leather to make it thinner
Leatherworking: making a belt loop
Leatherworking: bevelling the edge of a leather strip
Leatherworking: different grades of awl make different size holes
Leatherworking: making a leather belt


Loot: -1 good quality boiled leather belt buckle, +1 good quality leather belt
Injuries/Overstepping: -
Renown: Reviewer's discretion.
Wealth Points: -
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: [Mature] Stranger in a Strange Land
City/Area: Desnind
Notes/Warnings: This thread is marked as mature because it involves her rather extreme beliefs that slaves are not real people. These beliefs have been formed in her own mind out of a rationalization of why she and the other slave children her old master owned were treated differently than the kids of her master's family rather than anything her masters forced on her. Her masters did not discourage or correct those beliefs, however. In this thread, she is no longer a slave, but she still sees herself as such.
Skills Used: Detection; Novice (10/250 exp, 0 knowledges), Endurance; Novice (10/250 exp, 3 knowledges), Etiquette; Novice (10/250 exp, 0 knowledges)


Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Skill Knowledges

Detection: using your senses to try to figure out where you are
Detection: trying to identify a person by the sound of their voice
Detection: determining someone's mood by watching their facial expressions
Detection: listening for the signs that people are nearby
Endurance: the uncertainty of not knowing what's going on
Endurance: the fear of waking up in a strange place unexpectedly
Loot: none
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: none
Wealth Points: none
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: A Vested Interest
City/Area: Rharne, Stormlands
Notes/Warnings:
Skills Used: Fieldcraft (exp), Leatherworking (mas), Needlecraft (nov), Animal Husbandry (comp), Endurance (nov), Detection (comp)

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Needlecraft: saddle stitch
Leatherworking: seams are the weakest point
Leatherworking: mending a hide vest
Leatherworking: remove frayed threads from holes before reusing the holes
Leatherworking: mending a saddlebag
Leatherworking: keeping seams smooth enough not to chafe


Loot: -
Injuries/Overstepping: -
Renown: Reviewer's discretion.
Wealth Points: -
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: Tourists!
City/Area: Faldrass/Scalvoris
Notes/Warnings: Calendar event. Aidan is a Personal NPC.
Skills Used: GM Deception (106x/92k), GM Medicine (250x/123k), Master Athletics (151x/42k), Master Detection (151x/56k), Expert Endurance (76x/37k), Competent Swimming (26x/11k), Competent Strength (27x/30k)

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:
Athletics: Being light on your feet helps you run faster
Endurance: Swimming is exhausting
Medicine: Aloe vera and coconut oil prevent sunburn
Strength: Thrusting a parasol into the ground
Swimming: A kickboard allows you to stay afloat more easily
Swimming: Swimming backstroke

Loot: -
Injuries/Overstepping: -
Renown: Reviewer's discretion.
Wealth Points: -
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no
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Appearance

  • Due to an encounter with a magical tree Devin has bright violet eyes.
  • Devin has fancy black claw-like nails. The Grafter Rakvald made them from the spines that grow on the dubaebo's back and attached them to Devin's hands.

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Devin owns a Ring of Reversal. He's always wearing it, unless stated otherwise.

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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6



Thread Name: First Lesson
City/Area: Viden Acadmy
Notes/Warnings: Abandoned, but i tried to finish it up as much as I could. I'm going to use the linguistics capstone bonus of the teacher (received permission from the city mod as such), to learn common, so if you check his cs for common proficiency, that's why I say that he learned it well.
Skills Used: Novice: Linguistics, Socialization.
Competent: Medicine.

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Linguistics: Common: Phrases and longer sentences are made to flow with conjunctions and similar words.
Linguistics: Common: Using past present and future tenses can inform your statements properly, to make clear when they happened.
Linguistics: Common: There are far too many words in the Common Language to keep them all straight, without a proper lesson plan.
Medicine: Poisons: Language isn't a poison, not literally anyway.
Medicine: Poisons: The idea of a contagion or toxin that spreads through a population.
Medicine: Poisons: The figurative similarities between communication and toxic spread are enlightening, and may lead to future innovation.

Loot: 5:1 discount on languages learned with points earned from this thread.
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: none
Wealth Points: none
Collaboration: Yes please
Magic Experience?: no

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Identity

Nzi'Fuma is going by the name Zemos until further notice

Marks

Yithnai: Nzi'Fuma has glowing green eyes.
Witchmarks and Mutations:
  • Dread Warpaint: Zemos' upper face has a darkened discoloration, like sticky tar to the touch. It resembles warpaint.
  • Flies and other insects tend to crawl over his body intermittently. Sometimes a maggot can be seen crawling over his skin.
  • He has a slight slowness to his speech, as if he struggles to keep his tongue low in his mandible.

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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: A Little Polish
City/Area: Beacon, Haven Farm
Notes/Warnings: Thread uses NPCs from the location listed above. Balthazar uses his magic bag. This is the first of what will be a series of threads addressing the Unrest in Beacon calendar event (Prologue?). I'm not claiming knowledge for it, all he really does it walk and talk.
Skills Used: Discipline (Expert), Investigation (Expert), Socialization (Expert), Psychology (Expert), Detection (Expert), Athletics (Expert)

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: None.
Loot: None.
Injuries/Overstepping: If applicable.
Renown: If applicable.
Wealth Points: None.
Collaboration: No
Magic Experience?: No
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Mutations
Defiance: Skin always glows faintly and he is warm to the touch. His is also the center of a field of static electricity so people get shocked touching him on occasion.
Rupturing: Orange etheric cracks spider-web up his arms to his elbows. His eyes and the glowing cracks going down his cheeks glow dark blue.
Transmutation: He has a series of emerald, glowing cracks on his right pectoral.
Marks
Bellinos: His fingernails are always black. The color fades into his fingers.
Celarion: A dim glowing ring surrounds his left forearm.
Palenon: A silver lightning shaped mark about the size of a hand stretching up towards his torso.

Scars

  • Oops, Oops, Ouch: Balthazar Black has twenty scars across his back from a lashing as well as scars on his hands and arms from jagged rocks on Faldrass. There are two scars on the sides of his abdomen from being stabbed and a slash across his back which blends in with the whip scars.
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Thread Name: At the End of my Rope
City/Area: Viden
Notes/Warnings: Abandoned thread.

Zemos
Skills Used: Novice: Endurance, Alchemy, Textile Production.
Competent: Discipline, Meditation.

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Alchemy: Blood Magic: Taking blood of a mage or marked in order to understand the origin of abilities.
Endurance: The Egg can inflict horrible pain compliance upon its host.
Medicine: Drawing blood as a process in alchemy and medicine.
Textile Production: Crafting a rope from flaxen cloth.
Needlecraft: Tying a monkey's fist knot.
Needlecraft: Braiding a rope.

Loot: monkey's fist rope dart, made of flaxen cloth. Basic quality.
Doran
Skills Used:GM Alchemy, GM Detection, Master Medicine, Expert Teaching, Competent Etiquette

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge: none
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: none
Wealth Points: none
Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: no
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Identity

Nzi'Fuma is going by the name Zemos until further notice

Marks

Yithnai: Nzi'Fuma has glowing green eyes.
Witchmarks and Mutations:
  • Dread Warpaint: Zemos' upper face has a darkened discoloration, like sticky tar to the touch. It resembles warpaint.
  • Flies and other insects tend to crawl over his body intermittently. Sometimes a maggot can be seen crawling over his skin.
  • He has a slight slowness to his speech, as if he struggles to keep his tongue low in his mandible.

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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6



Thread Name: Small Talk about Fleas
City/Area: Viden/Anther's Ettyne
Notes/Warnings: Flea poison.
Skills Used:

Novice: Science, Endurance, Gardening Resistance.
Competent: Medicine, Discipline.
Expert: Fieldcraft.

Requested Rewards:
Knowledge:

Fieldcraft: Plantlife that hasn't been touched by insects may indicate that it's toxic to them.
Gardening: Tobacco plants require constant pruning to prevent the exhaustion of nutrients in the soil.
Medicine: Poisons: Concocting a simple flea-poison.
Medicine: Poisons: Larger animals might not find one concoction as deadly as a smaller one.
Medicine: Poisons: Producing a contact poison with a catalyst.
Medicine: Poisons: Using binders, inhibitors, and catalysts and mixing them in essential oil.

Loot: bought some flax-seed oil. Also created an average quality flea-poison/medicine (4 doses). Deducted 1 dose of Pain Button.
Injuries/Overstepping: none
Renown: none
Wealth Points: none
Collaboration: no
Magic Experience?: no

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Identity

Nzi'Fuma is going by the name Zemos until further notice

Marks

Yithnai: Nzi'Fuma has glowing green eyes.
Witchmarks and Mutations:
  • Dread Warpaint: Zemos' upper face has a darkened discoloration, like sticky tar to the touch. It resembles warpaint.
  • Flies and other insects tend to crawl over his body intermittently. Sometimes a maggot can be seen crawling over his skin.
  • He has a slight slowness to his speech, as if he struggles to keep his tongue low in his mandible.

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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: Of Men and Morties
City/Area: The Underground, Etzos
Notes/Warnings: Foul Language

Well, wrapping things up for Kas in Etzos, with the help of my lovely assistant Kimmy... that's what we call Obe now. He's cool with it, don't make a thing.

Requested Rewards:

OBERAN

Skills Used: Stealth (Grandmaster), Larceny (Master), Athletics (Master), Detection (Expert), Deception (Competent), Discipline (Competent), Intelligence (Competent), Socialization (Unskilled)

Knowledge:
Appraisal: Enjoying a damn good whiskey
Deception: Sometimes as simple as not correcting people when they make assumptions
Detection: Spotting weariness of age and lifestyle in a person/s face
Discipline: Keeping cool after offering someone a dagger to kill you with
Intelligence: Composing a cryptic message
Intelligence: Knowing the habits of others to anticipate their arrival
Socialization: Elaborate introduction
Socialization: Invite someone for a drink
Stealth Capstone: Appearing out of thin air
Stealth Capstone: Mysteriously vanishing for dramatic effect


Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No

KASORIA

Skills Used: Intelligence (Master), Detection (Master), Discipline (Master), Socialization (Unskilled)

Knowledge:
Detection: Deducing an Identity based on Clues and Description
Discipline: Sticking to an Old Plan
Discipline: Know When to Walk Away from a Continuing Conflict
Intelligence: Making the Rounds with Sources and Informants
Intelligence: Writing a Cryptic Message
Socialization: Don't Spoil a Final Meeting with Violence


Collaboration: Yes
Magic Experience?: No
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Re: Review Requests 2.2.6

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Thread Name: How to recognize different trees from quite a long way away
City/Area: Scalvoris (Surrounding Waters and Landmarks)
Notes/Warnings: Suggestive diri dancing

Faith: No rewards requested, just xp.

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Darius:

Skills Used: Athletics (Expert), Detection (Expert), Etiquette (Competent), Field Craft (Competent), Navigation (Competent)

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:

Skill Knowledge:

Athletics: Climbing a tree makes requires a greater balancing act than climbing a mast.
Etiquette: Making an introduction.
Field Craft: The only thing worse than wet feet is wet socks.
Field Craft: Beware of things falling from trees.
Field Craft: Check the temperature of river water before you get too wet.
Field Craft: How to ford a river.
Field Craft: Always take a spare pair of socks.
Medicine: The sap from the Yellow Dragon Tree promotes healing.
Medicine: The leaves of the Yellow Dragon Tree soothe burns.
Medicine: Grinding up bark from the Yellow Dragon Tree and infusing it in hot water can make a tea that breaks fevers.
Woodworking: Consider the properties of your chosen wood before deciding what to make out of it.

Non-Skill Knowledge:
Faith: Has a terrible sense of direction.
Oram: Is resourceful.
Location: Ol' Tuck's Run. Loot: Yellow Dragon Wood

Loot: Yellow Dragon wood
Injuries/Overstepping: None.
Renown: Reviewer's discretion
Wealth Points: None.
Collaboration: Yes.
Magic Experience?
: No.

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Oram:

Skills Used: Athletics (Competent), Detection (Expert), Endurance (Expert), Etiquette (Competent), Field Craft (Expert), Navigation (Competent)

Requested Rewards:

Knowledge:

Skill knowledge:

[Athletics] Climbing a tree can be harder than it looks.
[Field Craft] Yellow dragon trees have a distinctive appearance.
[Field Craft] Yellow dragon wood is sought after because of its long-burning qualities.
[Field Craft] Other parts of the yellow dragon tree (bark, flowers, leaves) have valuable medicinal properties.
[Field Craft] ‘Dummy-cording’ equipment to avoid losing it.
[Hunting] Early Ashan is a poor season for fur-trapping, but good for fishing and bird-hunting.
[Leadership] Calling attention to an unsafe situation.
[Logistics] Domain bags can carry lots and lots of stuff.
[Navigation] Ensuring that one can find a landmark again later.
[Navigation] Meanders can sometimes compel one to cross the same creek or river more than once.
[Socialization] Defusing a potential confrontation by showing you mean no harm.

Non-Skill Knowledge:

Darius: Is a good climber
Faith: Is famous.
Faith: Terrible sense of Direction.
Faith: Knowledgeable about healing and herbalism stuff
Plunder Bunny: Exudes machismo
Vri: Immortal of Death

Loot: Yellow Dragon wood and bark
Injuries/Overstepping: None.
Renown
: +5 for meeting and helping the "one and only" Faith Augustine (this is the first time Oram meets her)
Wealth Points: None.
Collaboration: Yes.
Magic Experience?: No.

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